Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions on matters that affect them . In my opinion, we should let children make their own decisions like we should let them choose which food they want to eat , which clothes they wanna wear but for entertainment we shouldn't let them watch whatever they want . There should be a screen limit and child screen on their mobile or tv so that even if they are watching content online it is child friendly. As for second opinion, child should be able to make decisions about matters that would affect them. For example if a child's parent are getting a divorce, Court or Judge should always ask the child which parent he wanna stay with. Another example is if parents are moving to a new city they should ask the children the consequences of moving into a different city , how it would affect child mentally as for some people making new friends is difficult, new surroundings is difficult some older students might bully new students. So for these kind of things it is always important to ask the child but for other major things like if a child say oh i wanna change my identity, i want to become trans . We shouldn't let them make these make these kind if decisions as for these kind of things , when they grow up they can make their iwn decisions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views and give a personal position: you support children choosing food and clothes, while arguing that entertainment needs limits. The examples about divorce and moving city are relevant and show awareness that decisions can affect children. However, the discussion is uneven and several points are asserted rather than explained. The divorce example, for instance, says a judge should ask the child which parent they want to live with, but does not consider the child’s age or the complexity of that decision. The final point about changing identity is abrupt and distracts from the central discussion. The response also falls 20 words short of the 250-word minimum; 47 words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop the reasons and examples more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a discernible sequence: it introduces your view, discusses everyday choices, then gives examples of decisions affecting children. Linking phrases such as “For example,” “Another example,” and “As for” help signal these moves. However, the ideas are presented in one long paragraph, so the two views and your conclusion are not clearly separated. Several transitions are abrupt, especially the shift from moving city to the final example about identity. Some sentences also contain multiple ideas joined by commas, making the progression harder to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the opposing view, your position and supporting examples, and a conclusion; then make each paragraph develop one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate your main ideas, including “screen limit,” “child friendly,” “divorce,” “new surroundings,” and “bully.” These choices make the examples understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “make decisions,” “difficult,” and “things.” Some expressions are imprecise or informal for an academic essay, such as “wanna,” “whatever they want,” and “oh I wanna change my identity.” There are also word-form or spelling slips, including “iwn” and “kind if decisions,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise phrasing and a consistently formal register, while choosing vocabulary that describes the issue rather than reproducing conversational speech.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and conditional structures, such as “if parents are moving to a new city they should ask the children,” and the main meaning is generally recoverable. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation. Examples include “a child's parent are getting a divorce,” “child should be able,” and “how it would affect child mentally.” The opening sentence also runs into the next point without clear sentence boundaries, while commas are often used where full stops are needed. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses. Check singular and plural agreement, articles before singular countable nouns, and punctuation at the end of each complete idea.

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