Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The debate is over allowing children to make their own choices everyday makes them selfish and on other hand some believes that they should be allowed to take their decision own.

Allowing children to have their decision by themselves have many positives ways like as children who hold their decisions becomes responsible because when a person face responsibilities becomes responsible and more confident. children becoming problem solving when they are independent and their critical thinking developed. children makes mistakes and when they are self hold they learned from that mistakes.

Secondly there are also many negative impacts allowing children have their own decisions because it make childs selfish and they didn`t know what is wrong or right for them so they can take harmful step for them and their future so parents are more responsible and they should teach them and help them to take their decision. When parents leave their child independent they earn selfish behaviour and forget discipline and also many children disrespect elders because they are unmature so they should be decisioned by their elders.

Lastly, I totally support that parent should help them to take their child decision.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: you explain that children’s choices may build responsibility and problem-solving, while also noting concerns about harmful decisions and discipline. Your final sentence gives a position in favour of parental guidance. However, the discussion is only partial: the reasons are asserted rather than explained with specific examples, and the view supporting children’s decision-making is not balanced against the opposing view in enough depth. The position also appears only at the end, so it is not consistently clear throughout. The response is 192 words, below the required 250, which limits the opportunity to develop the ideas. Extend each main point with a relevant example and state your view clearly in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and signposts such as “Secondly” and “Lastly” help the reader recognise a sequence of points. The two main views are also separated into different paragraphs. However, progression is limited: the first paragraph introduces the debate, but the body moves quickly through several claims without showing how they connect or developing a clear line of argument. “Lastly” introduces a conclusion rather than a final supporting point, and the conclusion simply repeats the preference for parental help. Some links are mechanical, while references such as “they” and “that” are not always precise. Use topic sentences to frame each paragraph, connect reasons to consequences, and make the conclusion synthesise your argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “responsible,” “confident,” “critical thinking,” “harmful,” and “discipline.” These words show that you can express several aspects of the debate. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “hold their decisions,” “self hold,” and “they should be decisioned by their elders” do not express the intended ideas clearly. There are also errors in word forms and spelling, such as “childs” and “unmature.” Build a more precise set of phrases for decision-making and parental guidance, and check collocations and word forms when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons, for example, “because when a person face responsibilities becomes responsible and more confident.” This shows an effort to explain cause and effect, but the longer structures are often faulty and can make the reader work to understand the point. Errors include subject–verb agreement (“a person face”), missing or incorrect articles and plurals (“children makes mistakes”), and incomplete sentence structure (“because when a person face responsibilities becomes responsible”). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached reason, then add more complex structures once those patterns are secure. Careful proofreading for agreement and sentence completeness would improve clarity.

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