Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, some individuals are things that allowing children to make their own choices on daily routine is likely to result in a community of peoples who only think about their own wishes. While some peoples are believe that it is important for child to make their decisions about matters that affect them. The former views is much important for the children. The both views are discussed below in the following paragraphs.

To begin with, their are some parents that child independents so they can allow to their child to make own decisions for daily routine matters in food, clothes and entertainment it is important to practice their child for making decision. Following that, from this child become not faced a difficult situation in their further life and they handler very relaxing and clam also they find solution easily. Besides this, the child can be satisficed to make or fulfill their own wishes and they are happy for doing these. For example, as per the research many children are making there own decisions in their life and they can not listing their parents.

On the other hand, some residents are very careful about their child so they can not make them decision by their own and parents should also scared that if their child are making decision by them own and as they become older they can not follow the parents instructions. Apart form this, a few parents have controlled on their children that they can not make decisions by them self.

In conclusion, many parents are allowing to making decision by their child to become independents in the life and have knowledge about the right and wrong decision. In my opinion, I believe former views are very useful to the Childers life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. For instance, the argument regarding children becoming independent is repetitive and lacks specific, well-explained examples. The conclusion is brief and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed. While the position is clear, the supporting arguments are somewhat superficial, preventing the response from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on expanding your points with more detailed explanations and concrete examples that directly relate to the prompt's focus on everyday choices.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Following that' and 'Apart form this'. There are also issues with logical progression; the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subject of certain sentences. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to be understood, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional confusion in sentence flow limit the score. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals will enhance the logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'some individuals are things that' instead of 'some individuals believe that', and 'child independents' instead of 'independent children'. The use of 'peoples' as a plural for 'people' is a recurring error. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You should focus on learning collocations and using more academic vocabulary to express your ideas more accurately and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement ('some peoples are believe'), incorrect word forms ('satisficed' instead of 'satisfied'), and awkward sentence structures. There is a limited range of complex structures, and the attempts made are often faulty, which can cause difficulty for the reader. Punctuation is also inconsistent. While the meaning is generally discernible, the persistent errors in basic grammar significantly impact the readability of the text. Focusing on sentence construction, verb tenses, and pluralization will be essential for improving your grammatical accuracy.

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