Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

It is believe by some that giving children the opportunity to make their own decision on daily needs at very young age would make them selfish. While on other people thought is that to confront challenges which might affect children, it is essential for them to make decisions. Although, allowing kids to live through their way might have some negative affect on them but the benefits of it is far more.

there are many reasons that children should take decisions by themself that might have impact on them. Firstly, it will develop self-confidence and selt-esteem which will help them to cope with things that are out of their comfort-zone. Children dont have to relly on their parents or wait for them to make decisions for them. Secondly, it will not only improve their personal life but also academic. In long run, they can decide their desire subject that can not be add on burden as today's children are already over-burden by complex subjects.

Moreover, children who takes their own decisions have the way of thinking critically as it makes them smarter. Beside that, It will make easier for them to study in a foreign country where they have to adjust and compromise things with their creative decisions. In addition, children with given independance from early childhood are likely to not need of any consulation from others on sophisicated matters.

On the other hand, Allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters wouldn't mean it will make them selfish. If they got to opt things by themself in near future they mighy insist for thing that are not neseccary which only be just waste of money. But sometimes it only depends on childern to childern , the onus is on the parents to give permissions on such matters.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, though the conclusion is incomplete, which impacts the overall development. The ideas regarding self-confidence and critical thinking are relevant, but the explanation of the opposing view is somewhat underdeveloped and lacks clarity. The argument that children might insist on unnecessary things is a good point, but it is not fully connected to the broader societal implications mentioned in the prompt. To improve, ensure that each paragraph fully explores the implications of the arguments and provide a complete, well-reasoned conclusion that synthesizes your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' are used to signal transitions. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and there are instances where the flow is interrupted by grammatical errors or awkward phrasing, such as 'Beside that, It will make easier'. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of a finished concluding paragraph makes the overall structure feel incomplete, which prevents a higher score in this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there is a lack of precision and some noticeable errors. Phrases like 'live through their way' and 'add on burden' are non-standard. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'selt-esteem', 'relly', 'independance', 'consulation', 'sophisicated', and 'neseccary'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, the frequency of errors and the reliance on basic phrasing limit the range. To reach a higher band, focus on accurate spelling and using more precise collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include 'It is believe by some', 'children who takes their own decisions', and 'they mighy insist for thing'. Subject-verb agreement and article usage are inconsistent. While the meaning is generally clear, the high density of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and verb forms would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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