Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the recent era, the thoughts of individuals changed a lot. The old people used to think that permitting children to live according to their own wills leads to the destruction of the society. But know their point of view has changed. I believe that letting children live their lives as per their own choice is a good thing. Firstly, I would like to talk about people who consider that allowing children to live according to their own choice leads to a society where people care only about their benefits and wishes. Well, it is a conservative thought. I will admit that is you allow the children do whatever they want makes them stubborn. But, if you always want them to comes up to your expectations, it may leads to a trauma that always
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 134 words. Because the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to address all parts of the task. The prompt asks for a discussion of both views and an opinion, but the development of these ideas is severely limited. The introduction is present, but the body paragraphs are not fully formed, and the conclusion is entirely missing. This lack of development and the failure to meet the minimum length requirement significantly impacts the score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows some attempt at logical organization, using transition words like 'Firstly' and 'But'. However, the abrupt ending and the lack of a clear paragraph structure make it difficult to follow a logical progression. Cohesive devices are used in a somewhat mechanical way, and the lack of completion prevents the development of a coherent argument. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall structure is fragmented due to the unfinished nature of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally simple and repetitive. Phrases like 'live according to their own will' and 'conservative thought' are used, but there is a lack of range and precision. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'In the recent era' instead of 'In recent years'. The limited length of the response restricts the opportunity to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary, which is necessary for higher band scores.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'the thoughts of individuals changed a lot' (should be 'have changed'), 'it may leads to' (should be 'it may lead to'), and 'is you allow' (should be 'if you allow'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with some attempts at complex sentences that contain errors. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the frequent grammatical slips and the incomplete nature of the sentences hinder the overall clarity of the writing.
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