Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Few people thought that permitting infants to build their-self wishes on everyday issues(like that of ,food ,clothes and entertainment )probably causes a society of persons who only believe about their own desires. Other being suggest that it is crucial for youngsters to construct ideas about situation that depend on them .I also think that allowing kids to make their own choice will make them independent .In this essay ,I will discuss weather little one have to make their own choices or not .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, which severely limits the development of ideas. While the prompt asks to discuss both views and provide an opinion, the essay only provides a brief introduction and fails to develop any body paragraphs or supporting arguments. The position is stated, but it is not extended or supported with examples or reasoning. Due to the extreme brevity, the task is only partially addressed, resulting in a low score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text consists of a single, short paragraph. There is no logical progression or paragraphing structure. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the topic, the lack of development makes it impossible to assess the use of cohesive devices or logical flow. The transition between the two views is abrupt, and the overall arrangement is insufficient for a formal essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. Phrases like 'build their-self wishes' and 'other being suggest' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over word choice and collocation. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the errors in word formation (e.g., 'weather' instead of 'whether') impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. Examples include 'Few people thought' (incorrect tense), 'build their-self wishes' (incorrect pronoun usage), and 'little one have to' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary spaces before commas and parentheses. The range of structures is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures or accurate control over basic grammar.
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