Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is disagreement about the fact if children should be allowed to make choices on their own daily life matters. While some believe that children should be given the freedom to choose the daily necessities like food, clothes and entertainment, others argue that this might them turn into self-centered individuals. This essay will discuss both perspectives, although I believe children should be given the option to choose for themselves but under parental guidance.

The main advantage of letting children choose some basic needs is that they tend to become independent from an early stage in life. This leads them to develop a habit of making major decisions easily. By starting with small decisions their critical thinking ability gets enhanced as well. As children's majority mental and physical development happens quite early in life, it is important that they are given the choice to think about every age appropiate matter.

However, I think this should be done under some parental guidance. Because children do not always know what is right or wrong for them but with a parent's proper and responsible directions, they will be able to learn these things. This would also strengthen the bond between children and their parents allowing the offsprings to have good faith in their parents.

On the contrary, some people think that letting children decide about things that effect them might turn them into selfish individuals in future. Since, the things children learn early in life usually tend to stick with them for the rest of their lives. This might be true if the children are not taught the difference between right and wrong while they are asked to make a decision.

To conclude, although allowing children to make trivial decisions by themselves might make them selfish but I believe with proper guidance this can be prevented. And allowing children to make decisions for themselves will enhance their cognitive abilites for future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The essay addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both the potential for selfishness and the benefits of decision-making. You clearly state your position in the introduction and maintain it throughout. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding 'selfish individuals' is mentioned but not deeply explored with concrete examples or nuanced reasoning. To reach a higher band, ensure that each body paragraph provides a more thorough explanation of the 'why' and 'how' behind your claims, rather than just stating them. The conclusion effectively summarizes your stance, though it could be more sophisticated.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'On the contrary', and 'To conclude' to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel a bit repetitive. Referencing is generally clear, but the connection between the idea of 'parental guidance' and the 'selfishness' argument could be more tightly integrated to improve the overall progression of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'cognitive abilities', 'critical thinking', and 'necessities'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'offsprings' (which is usually uncountable as 'offspring') and 'age appropiate' (spelling error). While you attempt to use less common vocabulary, the range is somewhat limited, and you rely on fairly standard phrasing. To improve, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive structures to show a more flexible command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this level. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'might them turn into' (word order), 'effect' instead of 'affect', and 'children's majority mental' (awkward phrasing). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. You should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct usage of modal verbs. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you move into the higher band range.

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