Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The statment states thats there are multiple concepts and possible outcomes of either letting children to choose what thry want or if parents should choose them themselves.

To begin with the 1st perspective which is to lett childrens choose what they want .this can be proven to benefecial as it will give students a sense of responsibility and freedom but this should b done in a very limmited approach to minimize thre possible risks of loosing the control over senstive matters where parental interference is required.like adults childs deseve the right to pick things too. They should be allowed to watch their favourites shows but shold be monitored as well ,they have allthe rights to wear their favourite clothes if fall right in appropriate bracket.This will not only uplift there indvidual personality but will turn them into indviduals who knows how to take decision.

On the other hand allowing children completley to take their own decision indepently is quite a risky move as it can result either into effective decision or disaster as childersn do not carry thr ability of understanding fucture outcomes of decions, especially ter decions realted to their schooling which should be done by parents.still regardless kids should sould have a least margin in contributing to any decsion that is being taken by their gaurdians.

I perdsonally belive that parents should alwyas consider to involve their kids as they are the one to go through these decions and it will also provide the crucial insights which will led to even better decion making

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the argument regarding children's inability to understand 'future outcomes' is mentioned but not fully explored with specific examples or logical depth. The essay covers all parts of the prompt, but the discussion remains at a general level, lacking the depth required for a higher band score. The position is consistent throughout, but the supporting arguments could be more robustly extended to demonstrate a more sophisticated understanding of the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, the transition 'To begin with the 1st perspective' is informal and clunky. There are issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, which disrupts the flow of the text. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical connection between sentences could be improved to ensure a smoother transition between the two viewpoints and the conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'statment', 'thry', 'benefecial', 'limmited', 'loosing', 'senstive', 'childs', 'deseve', 'indviduals', 'fucture', and 'perdsonally'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. While the student attempts to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'parental interference' and 'future outcomes', the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. The lack of control over word formation and spelling significantly impacts the clarity of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('childs deseve', 'individuals who knows'), incorrect word forms, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, with few attempts at complex sentences. When complex structures are attempted, they are often marred by errors in punctuation and syntax. The frequent errors in basic grammar, combined with the lack of consistent punctuation, make the text difficult to read at times. A wider range of error-free complex structures is needed to achieve a higher band score.

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