Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

According me, We have to allow the children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) because i think that it play a important role in children life. It helps in decision making and confidence built in children.

Now i give you a example according to my experience. I have a childhood friend named Waqar which is also a our neighbour. And now He is a Member Provincial Assembly (MPA) and a Successfull politician mainly the reason or a problem is that He from start He have a freedom on everday matter. So his confidence goes to another level and one by one He goes up the success stairs and On other hand Me which is opposite to that have no freedom to take my own decision and moral lack in confidence and decision making. So that's why I think that you have to give a feedom to your children on everday matters.

This generation is also agree with my opinion because they now that the confidence and decision making ability plays a important role in human life. It is possible to make the man successfull but from the begining because the base of anything matters.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both sides of the argument, but the development is quite limited. While you provide a personal example, the discussion of the opposing view (that children might become self-centered) is entirely absent. The essay focuses almost exclusively on the benefits of autonomy. To achieve a higher band, you must explore the potential drawbacks mentioned in the prompt, such as the risk of children becoming selfish or lacking discipline. The position is clear, but the lack of balance in the discussion means the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the structure is quite basic. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas smoothly; for example, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraph is abrupt. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'And now He is a Member Provincial Assembly', where the connection to the previous sentence is weak. The progression of ideas is somewhat repetitive, and the final paragraph does not effectively summarize the main points or provide a strong conclusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'everyday matters' and 'important role'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'moral lack in confidence' (which is unclear) and 'the base of anything matters'. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range is not sufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To improve, you should focus on using more varied vocabulary related to child development and decision-making, and pay closer attention to correct word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('it play a important role'), article usage ('a example'), and sentence structure ('mainly the reason or a problem is that He from start He have a freedom'). You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve your score.

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