Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Many people thought if they allow their children to make their own choices they would be think only of their own while other argues that it would make children strong to deal with matters which disturb them. In my opinion both the views are correct.
First of all, some individuals ask that if they allow their teenagers to make their decision by their own so they will become a part of society which only think about their own. For example, when they were taught to buy their everything by their own they would not need anyone help. By this they thought that they don't need anyone in their life as they can make their decision by themselves. they started staying alone in contrast they don't help any other as in their believe no one is important for them. They start living by their own.
On other hand, it would be beneficial for a child to make its decision by its own if it would be limited. For example, you should taught your child how to deal with problems that disturbs him most so it would help him future. This type of decision making built self confidence in children and made him strong. So in future if he face a problem he should bare it very patiently and should be able to construct the solution.
To sum up all, allowing children to make their choice in everything is not good but allowing them to make their choice in a problem that affect that would make them independent and strong.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the negative impact of autonomy are somewhat repetitive and lack depth, while the positive side is underdeveloped. The explanation of how decision-making builds confidence is quite brief. To improve, you should provide more specific, real-world examples rather than general statements. The position is clear, but the supporting arguments need more elaboration to reach a higher band level.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, the transition 'On other hand' is missing an article, and the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, making the logic difficult to follow in places. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the use of 'it' when referring to a child. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your pronouns clearly refer back to the intended nouns.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'buy their everything' and 'disturbs him most'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use less common or more precise lexical items. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and avoid repeating the same words (like 'decision' or 'choice') multiple times in a single paragraph.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('other argues', 'they would be think'), article usage, and tense consistency. While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent and occasionally impede the flow of the text. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb forms.
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