Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

If we talk about the some people who believes in allowing their children to make their own choices here the choices include the selection of friends circle to remain in touch with the social network and also results in maintenance of their well managed public relations and also help to maintain well public reputation.public reputation is an essential and also world wide crucial and very important role in keeping social network well managed.In developed states or in developed countries it is considered to keep a good and better public reputation.If we talk about the entertainment of children it is more important for building their future ,to maintain their own choices and social network and social circles .It is a research that in developed countries more people prefer well managed public relations and to overcome over the issues and problems they are facing all over the world .If we look about the social network of a young children chosen by himself it is a successful method for his success.The success ratio in initial time was very low but time to time it has been increased at a very wide level .Here the interest of child also matters if he is interested in some games he will be given free and independent hand .Let suppose if he is not given free and independent hand he could not manage his future as well .It is my little research that parents must compromise their children to make their own choices and decisions as well

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The instructions require a discussion of both views regarding children making their own choices, yet the essay focuses almost exclusively on 'social networks' and 'public reputation,' which are largely irrelevant to the examples provided in the prompt (food, clothes, entertainment). The argument is repetitive and lacks a clear position or logical development. The essay does not engage with the core tension between individual autonomy and the potential for self-centeredness. Consequently, the response is underdeveloped and fails to meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. It is presented as a single block of text rather than distinct paragraphs, which makes it difficult to follow. There is no clear progression of ideas; sentences are linked in a repetitive and mechanical way, often using 'If we talk about' or 'If we look about.' Cohesive devices are used incorrectly or are absent, leading to a disjointed reading experience. The lack of paragraphing and the absence of clear topic sentences significantly hinder the flow of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases such as 'well managed public relations,' 'social network,' and 'public reputation' are used excessively throughout the text, indicating a lack of lexical variety. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'overcome over the issues' and 'parents must compromise their children.' The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the misuse of terms often obscures the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is characterized by frequent errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'some people who believes'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to parse. There is a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are generally unsuccessful and contain significant errors. The high frequency of basic grammatical mistakes prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.

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