Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In my perspective yes the children must be allowed to everything of their life the reason is that they learn many aspect of life in early age like they will making decision improtant without any help and if they make wrong they will be able in make decision with more deeply understanding and focused on every point of view they will think what if it turn out in different way and help them to face the real world more bravely and wisely. They will able to servive in different condition if decision will go right or wrong benifical or harmful.They will be more confidencial in their life choices and decision.
And the aspect who think children not allowed to live their life will destory their t life because they are not allowed to children to select their wishes more like the cjildren hate their parent and their home and also life the reason is that when they see their other class follow to live the life they want because they living life their own their own will wishes life choice they want to do that they lie to their parent to full fill their wishes their will different inside the home anf outside the home they will hide that will harmful for furthur they will not able confidencial person in their whole life.
The fact is that the parents must be friendly so their children will share their choice if it is not right the parent give them the reason why not to do that.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response addresses both views regarding children making their own choices and touches upon the writer's own opinion regarding friendly parenting. However, the ideas are under-developed, limited, and lack clear support or relevant examples. The writing struggles to maintain a coherent stance due to severe language limitations, shifting between the benefits of autonomy and the negative emotional consequences of strict parenting. The response represents a clear Band 4 performance because the ideas are expressed minimally and tangentially, struggling to fully engage with all parts of the task in a structured manner.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text suffers from a major lack of logical organisation and progression. Paragraphing is highly problematic, with the response crammed into two massive, block-like paragraphs that fail to structure the arguments clearly. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, making it difficult to follow the progression of thoughts. Phrases such as 'And the aspect who think' and 'The fact is that' fail to create a smooth transition between ideas. Referencing and pronoun usage are frequently unclear, leading to a disjointed reading experience that aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple everyday terms. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'beneficial', 'harmful', and 'confidential' (misused in place of confident), but these attempts result in frequent word-choice and spelling errors, such as 'servive', 'confidencial', 'cjildren', and 'furthur'. These lexical limitations and errors strain the reader and obscure meaning throughout the text, placing the lexical performance firmly at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited and heavily flawed. The response consists mostly of long, run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation and structural control, such as 'In my perspective yes the children must be allowed to everything of their life the reason is that they learn many aspect of life in early age...'. There is an almost complete absence of error-free sentences, with severe structural fragmentation, missing verbs, and incorrect tense usage. These frequent and dense errors constantly distort meaning and impede communication, reflecting the criteria for a Band 4 score.
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