Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

CHILDREN ARE KHNOW AS THE RAW MUD . WE ARE ABLE TO MAKE OUR CHILDREN AS WE WANT.

IT IS GOOD TO ALLOW CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN DICCCISION ON EVERY DAY NEEDS.IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE DECISIONS ANOUT MATTER OR ASPECTS WHIHCH AFFECT THEM. IF CHILDREN WILL BE CAPABLE OF MAKING THEIUR OWN DECISION IN DIALY HOUSE HOLD THING LIKE WHAT THE FOOD THEY LIKE OR WHAT THEY WANT TO EAT , WHICH CLOTHES SUITED THEM THE MOST OR WHAT THEY LIKE TO WEAR, OR WHAT TYPE OF BOOKS ,THE SOURCE OF ENTERTAINMENT THEY WANT. IF THEY WILL BE CAPABLE OF CHOSING THINGS ON THEIR BEHALF THEY WILL BE ABLE TO MAKE THE GOOD DECISION RELATED TO THEIR LIFE IN THE FUTURE.

FOR EXAMPLE : HE OR SHE WANT TO STUDY ABOUT THE MATH AFTER THE HIGH SCHOOLS AND AS HE OR SHE IS GROWN UP MAKING HER OR HE OWN DECISION THEY WILL CHOOSE DEFINETY MATH SUBJECT WHICH IS THEIR FAVOURITE.

IN THE OTHER HAND, MAKING FREE TO OUR CHILDREN TO TAKE THE DECISION THEY WANT CAN MAKE THEM WISE. THEY WILL ONLY THINK ABOUT THE THING THEY LIKE THE MOST AND DONT RESPECT OTHER POINT OF VIEW. ONE WISE PEOPLE MAKE THE WHOLE SOCIETY WISE.

FOR EXAMPLES : THEIR ARE TWO FRIENDS AND TEACHER GIVE THEM 2 APPLES BUT ONE OF THE FRIENDS ATE IT ALL . AND ANOTHER FRIENDS DOESNT GET ANYTHING TO EAT THIS MEANS THE CHILDREN THINK OF THEIR OWN NEEDS AND DOESNT SHARE IT WITH FRIENDS.

AS IT HAS BOTH THE OPINION IS CORRECT IN THEIR OWN WAY, THE MAIN ROLE WILL BE THEIR BY THEIR PARENTS . PARENTS NEED TO TEACH THEIR CHILD TO BECOME INDEPENDENT ABOUT THE NEEDS AND CHOICES AS THE OTHER HAND THEIR CHOICES AND THE NEEDS SHOULDNOT AFFECT THE OTHERS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the task, discussing the advantages of letting children make choices and the potential negative outcome of producing self-centered individuals, while also providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times repetitive. For instance, the example about two friends sharing apples attempts to illustrate selfishness, but the reasoning is simplistic and underdeveloped. The position is discernible in the conclusion, where the writer suggests parental guidance is necessary to balance independence with consideration for others, but overall the arguments lack depth and academic extension, aligning well with the Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps structure the discussion, but the overall progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor transitions and confusing logic. The use of uppercase letters throughout the text creates a jarring visual and structural obstacle. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'IN THE OTHER HAND' instead of 'On the other hand'. Furthermore, referencing is unclear at times, and the abrupt transitions between sentences make the flow disjointed. There is some basic organization, but the lack of accurate cohesive management places this response securely in Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Lexical range is basic and heavily constrained by frequent spelling and word-choice errors. The essay contains severe non-systematic spelling mistakes, such as 'KHNOW' for known, 'DICCCISION' for decision, 'ANOUT' for about, 'WHIHCH' for which, 'DIALY' for daily, and 'DEFINETY' for definitely. The student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary like 'independence', 'choices', and 'society', but the numerous errors in spelling and collocation cause strain for the reader and impede fluent communication, reflecting the characteristics of Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple and complex sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and article usage, such as 'CHILDREN ARE KHNOW AS THE RAW MUD', 'WHAT THE FOOD THEY LIKE', 'WHICH CLOTHES SUITED THEM', and 'HE OR SHE WANT TO STUDY ABOUT THE MATH AFTER THE HIGH SCHOOLS'. Punctuation is also heavily misused, with erratic capitalization across the entire text. These persistent errors frequently distort meaning and cause severe difficulty for the reader, which corresponds to the Band 4.0 descriptor level.

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