Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Few individuals argue that giving permission to children about make choice on regular matters like food, wear and for entertainment is lead people of community think about their own wishes. On the other hand, few believe that it is crucial for children to make decision which affect them. I will discuss both the perspective and give my point of view that children have to make their own decision.

On the one hand, few people believe that children should make their own decision about regular activities which being happiness and comfort zone in their life. To be more precise, children love to their favourite things like choosing favourite food provide joy as well as choosing clothes give them confidence and preferring their own entertainment lead relax session. By doing their favourite things give them freedom and they start to love their life. For example, according to one survey done by Times of India reveals that 85% of student are look stress-free

and joyful. This shows that give permission to children to making decision about their life they might feel independent.

On the other hand, some individual think about children decision that they just have to choose that things which

affect their lives. In other words, children have to change the things which being bad impact on their life.

Such as affecting their tastebud, feel uncomfortable in some clothes as well as in entertainment sources. That type of small things affect children mind life. To illustrate, according to one research done by Amity University of Jaipur claims that 20% of children get depression type situation due to don't doing their favorite things. This shows that children also want to complete their wishes but if not they feel disappointed in life.

In conclusion, some people argue that children only have to choice that things which have for their life. Until, few people and I believe that children have to allow to make choice about their day to day lives.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on children making everyday decisions and providing a personal opinion in the introduction and conclusion. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times repetitive. The reasoning regarding the psychological impact of decision-making tends to over-generalize and lacks fully articulated supporting arguments. For instance, the use of statistics attributed to surveys is vague and does not effectively bolster the central arguments. While a position is stated, the execution remains basic, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptor where ideas are somewhat under-developed and the task is only partially explored in terms of depth and analytical rigor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is arranged into four clear paragraphs, following a standard essay structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand,' which are used repetitively. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the concluding paragraph where the sentence structure 'Until, few people and I believe...' creates confusion rather than cohesion. Paragraphing is present, but overall the flow suffers from inadequate and sometimes inaccurate cohesive devices, placing the response firmly at Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'giving permission to children about make choice' and 'wear and for entertainment.' The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'tastebud' and 'independent,' but these are often used inaccurately or unidiomatically. Spelling and word-formation errors—such as 'being' instead of 'bring' or 'bring about'—occur throughout the text. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic topic, the noticeable errors and limited range restrict the score to a Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and flawed attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors that impede comprehension, such as 'children love to their favourite things like choosing favourite food provide joy' and 'due to don't doing their favorite things.' Punctuation and verb tense agreement are inconsistently controlled. Because attempts at complex sentence forms are frequently faulty and errors cause difficulty for the reader, this performance corresponds to a Band 4.5, rounded to a Band 5.

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