Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In todays world children as write to take there know decision on anything such as foods,clothes,and entertainment is likely to conclude in a comunities of individuals who believe about their own wishes.However other consider that it is pivotol for children to make decisions which matter that harm them. My view in subsequent paragraph.
To commence,children nowdays has potential to take their own decision because they know the world or they learn the various think in the school such as clothes ,food ,and entertainment . For instance teacher teach student that they should know there write and never overcomit things.In addition mostly student scrolling on internet and they think net show the reality of the life.
Furthermore. I believe the graurdian has write to take decision of there children because they know the world more than them. So they know the write things For example They never go to school but they are sending there child because in this today world without education no one can survie therfore they are sending there child for the better future.
In conclusion, Children has also the write to take their decision or choose the write one but they are not to mature to take this decision,So I believe decision should be taken by the senior of the house Because they know in this world no will come to help there child so they have to grow there carier and parent always choose the write decision for there child due to there past experience .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic prompt requirements. However, the ideas are severely under-developed and difficult to follow due to poor phrasing. For instance, the student states 'other consider that it is pivotol for children to make decisions which matter that harm them,' which distorts the meaning of the second view. Examples given, such as teachers explaining 'write' (rights) or the internet showing 'reality of the life,' lack clarity and logical connection to the prompt. The position is discernible at the end, but the overall lack of fully extended arguments places this performance firmly at Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak and ideas are disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used inappropriately, such as 'Furthermore. I believe...' with a stray full stop. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to determine what 'they' or 'them' refers to in sentences like 'they never go to school but they are sending there child.' Overall, the information and ideas are not arranged coherently, warranting a Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with numerous severe spelling and word-choice errors that constantly strain the reader. Throughout the text, the word 'right' is consistently misspelled as 'write' (e.g., 'know there write', 'have the write'). Other significant errors include 'pivotol' for pivotal, 'comunities' for communities, 'graurdian' for guardian, and 'carier' for career. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for this academic task, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple structures and failed attempts at complex sentences. There are almost no error-free sentences in the entire text. Frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'children nowdays has potential'), and punctuation heavily impede communication. For example, 'So they know the write things For example They never go to school but they are sending there child...' demonstrates a fundamental lack of control over basic sentence boundaries and grammatical structures, corresponding to Band 4.0.
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