Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Now a days most of the people think that to give permission to their chidern to make their own choise on everyday situations like what thing to eat ,wear or other entertatinment purposes it is very likey to result in society of by own individuals those who think about their own wishes
They all are individuals what to do in their own lifes but on the other hand side many people think that it is very imporant for childern to make their life decision about any kind of matter that affect on them childern should have to make their life decision by their own like what they have to attain in their life
most of the people do not allow to their childern
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response is severely under-length, containing only 123 words against the required 250-word minimum. This results in a failure to properly address all parts of the task. While the student touches upon the two opposing views regarding children making everyday choices, the ideas are extremely truncated, underdeveloped, and lack any meaningful elaboration or a clear personal opinion. For instance, sentences such as 'most of the people do not allow to their childern' trail off and remain incomplete. Because the response is less than half the required length and fails to develop a fully formed discussion or stance, it falls into the Band 4 descriptor range for failing to present a complete task response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks clear overall progression and organization due to its fragmented nature and lack of proper paragraphing. The response is essentially a single, poorly structured block of text with run-on sentences and missing punctuation, making logical flow very difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitions like 'on the other hand side' and 'like what they have to attain'. Referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader confused about pronoun antecedents and sentence boundaries. This corresponds to the Band 4 descriptor where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include spelling errors like 'chidern', 'choise', 'entertatinment', 'likey', 'lifes', and 'imporant'. The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'everyday situations' and 'entertainment purposes', but the limited control and lack of precision restrict the range. Because the errors are frequent and strain the reader throughout the short text, the lexical performance aligns closely with Band 4 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed, run-on simple and attempted complex sentences that lack necessary punctuation and capitalization. Errors are very frequent and severely distort meaning, such as in 'many people think that it is very imporant for childern to make their life decision about any kind of matter that affect on them'. Subject-verb agreement issues, missing articles, and incorrect preposition use ('affect on them', 'allow to their childern') are pervasive. Due to the high frequency of basic structural errors that impede understanding, the grammar is placed at Band 4.
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