Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Todays era, children are given more freedom to the their decision than past era. some people believe that children to provide freedom their own chices on necessary. such as food, clothes and entertainments. Thus positive impact to the chidren. Children can learn to the dependence and responsible. Other people argue that the prove a more freedom to the children to make selfish and egoistic.Although sometimes take wrong decision and lost your career.

There are several reason to the individuals make liberty to their chidren. Parents allows to the liberty to make some decisions can help them become independent and responsible. When teenagers are involved take a decision sirectly ipact in your life, so that's why they can truthly thinking after that they take some making decision. They learn how to overcome problem and also taught the problem learning skill. Meanwhile, they understand the consequences of their choice. For instance, patent can allow autonomy to children their hobbies, how to interence subject , field so they easily built career and boost children confidence. Moreover, children may empathy for their parents as well as they always respect their parents.

On the other hand, giving too much freedom can have some negative influences of children. Young people do not enought experienceto understanding every decision. For example parents always choose children clothes, food, entertainment because of teenagers and children always prefer to the unhealthy food, negative impact on the children health. Children always a lots of hours to watch entertainment series, cartoon and movies . They not fully concentrate to the education so loss your education.

In my opinion, chioldren should be reasonable freedom provide not too much. However parent should be provide appropriate guidence. Parents should be provide a freedm depent on the children age and maturity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both views on children making everyday decisions and providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas remains limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion on why children gain independence is rushed, and the counterarguments regarding negative impacts rely on basic assertions about unhealthy food and lost education without deep extension. While a position is presented throughout the essay, the reasoning is somewhat repetitive and lacks the fully supported argumentation required for a higher level. To progress, the writer needs to expand each main idea with more detailed explanations and relevant, specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay displays some overall organization with clear paragraphing separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there is a lack of clear overall progression, and the logical flow between sentences is frequently disrupted. Cohesive devices are often inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the frequent misuse of transitional phrases like 'Meanwhile' and 'Moreover'. Additionally, referencing and pronoun use are unclear in places (for example, 'lost your education'), which hinders the smooth development of the argument. To improve, the writer should focus on using a wider and more accurate range of cohesive links and ensure that each sentence logically builds on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and collocation frequently occur, such as 'prove a more freedom', 'patent can allow autonomy', and 'interence subject'. Furthermore, there are multiple spelling and morphological errors, including 'chices', 'sirectly', 'ipact', 'truthly', 'enought', and 'guidence'. These lexical inaccuracies and non-standard forms cause some difficulty for the reader and restrict the score. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their vocabulary range and improve accuracy in word formation and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and attempts at complex structures that are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('in past era'), incorrect verb forms ('children to provide freedom', 'parents allows to the liberty'), and flawed prepositional use within grammatical patterns. These frequent errors often cause difficulty for the reader and can distort the intended meaning. To improve, the writer needs to gain better control over basic sentence patterns, subject-verb agreement, and verb tenses, while reducing the density of grammatical mistakes.

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