Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Few people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters such as food,clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a socity of individuals who only assume about their own wishes. Other people assume that it is vital for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.I strongly believe that some people allowing children to make their own choices on their daily lifestyle.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, stopping abruptly at only 82 words. Because the text is severely truncated and unfinished, the task is addressed only minimally. The writer attempts to introduce the topic by mentioning children making everyday choices, but the response cuts off mid-sentence and fails to discuss both views or provide a developed position. To achieve a higher score, the writer must fully develop an essay of at least 250 words, thoroughly exploring both sides of the argument and presenting a clear, supported personal opinion throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.0
The text lacks a clear overall progression because it consists of a short introductory fragment followed by an unfinished sentence. While the writer attempts paragraphing, the second paragraph is merely a broken fragment starting with 'some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everday because'. There is no logical sequencing or effective use of cohesive devices to connect ideas meaningfully. To improve, the writer needs to organise ideas into distinct, fully developed paragraphs with logical transitions that guide the reader smoothly from the introduction through the body arguments to a conclusion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is minimally adequate for basic communication, though it features noticeable errors such as misspelling 'society' as 'socity' and awkward word choices like 'assume about their own wishes' instead of 'think only of their own desires'. The range of vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the prompt's own wording. To move to a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical range by incorporating less common and more precise vocabulary, avoiding spelling errors, and demonstrating better control over collocations and word choice.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammar demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying on simple patterns with frequent errors. There are noticeable issues with punctuation and missing spaces, such as 'food,clothes' and 'choices.Other', as well as grammatical awkwardness in phrases like 'some people allowing children to make their own choices on their daily lifestyle'. These errors can cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of complex sentence structures while improving accuracy in basic grammar, punctuation, and word patterns.
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