Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is undeniable that, nowdays children loves freedom. In this regards, several people thinks that allowing children to make their choices on everyday matters is likely to result in a society of individuals who think about their own wishes while other believe opposite. This essay will outline not only the both perspective but also my opinion which is in favor of former's view in upcoming paragraphs with logical conclusion.

To commence with, allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters can affect their personailty in a negative way. Food of their choice can be unhealthy for their health because child prefer taste over health. To justify it, children love eating junk food and when they have access to make choice they can overeat junk food which may result in illness. In modern world, Children have access of laptop or mobile phones, in over sight of parents, they can choose to play excessive video games or can watch inapproprite content. So, letting them to make their own choices without supervision can turn out dangeroues.

Nevertheless, even after these disadvantages few people believe that it is important for children to make their decisions about matters that affect them because these tiny decisions prepare them for future responsibilities. The idea of letting them chosse tend to stronger and sharper mind ability.

In conclusion, i believe that disadvantages of choice making overweigh the advange but it can be resolved by creating some limits and supervision of adults till certain age. But after specific age the child should be free for making their own choices completely.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You present a position: you favour limiting children’s choices, with greater freedom later, and you give relevant examples involving unhealthy food and unsupervised screen use. However, the discussion is only partial. The argument against children choosing is developed more than the opposing view, which receives only the brief claim that small decisions prepare children for responsibility; this idea needs explanation and a specific example. Your conclusion also introduces an age-based qualification that is not developed in the essay. The response is 233 words, below the 250-word minimum; the 30 words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop both views more fully and explain how your proposed limits would work.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting concerns, a paragraph on the benefits of choice, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “To commence with,” “Nevertheless,” and “In conclusion” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is limited, and the second viewpoint is too brief to balance the first. Some connections are unclear: “The idea of letting them chosse tend to stronger and sharper mind ability” does not clearly explain how decision-making builds responsibility. The introduction’s promise to discuss “both perspective” is also awkwardly phrased. Use clearer topic sentences, explain each claim in a logical sequence, and connect examples explicitly to the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “everyday matters,” “junk food,” “video games,” “supervision,” and “future responsibilities.” This gives the response enough basic language to communicate its main points. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate word choices, collocations, and spelling errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “personailty,” “in over sight of parents,” “inapproprite content,” and “turn out dangeroues.” Phrases such as “sharper mind ability” and “disadvantages of choice making overweigh the advange” are difficult to interpret. Build a more precise vocabulary for autonomy and guidance, and check spelling and common word combinations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrastive structure beginning “Nevertheless” and a conditional idea about children having access to devices. However, errors are frequent, and some sentence patterns are faulty enough to make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “children loves freedom” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “several people thinks” repeats this problem. In “Food of their choice can be unhealthy for their health because child prefer taste over health,” article use and agreement are also inaccurate. The final sentence, “after specific age the child should be free for making,” shows problems with articles and grammatical construction. Practise accurate basic clauses first, then build longer sentences with controlled subordination and punctuation.

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