Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In todays world allowing children to make their own choices on everyday life is essential for them to learn about decision making . Children learn from their decisions . Their opinion matters in choices taken by parents .

Further , children start learning from their decisions . Letting them do what they want and asking them for their opinion encurage's them to learn decision making . For example ; if the child if below 10 years of age you can ask them what they want to wear & what they want to eat and by asking them these questions they learn to give their opinion and make their choices clear .Thiis indicates that a child is learning about making their decision .

Moreover , not letting your child learn about decision making from younger age might create issue in the future . Later in life when they are grown up and are young teenagers they face difficulties in making cheir choices . For example , a boy who's age is 12 years and he wants to take decision while shopping with his mother and he is confused what he wants and later when his mother purchases what she likes , the boy is not happy with that choice . This indicates not learning at younger age creates problem later in life

In conclusion , it is important for childern to take thier decisions on their own . Parents are supposed to give them choices . Whether to ask their child for small or greater opinions . Giving their children opinion will help them learn about decision making and develop a skill .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion that children should be allowed to make decisions, and you support it with examples about choosing food, clothes and shopping. However, the task asks you to discuss both views, and the opposing concern—that children may become self-centred—is not explained or considered. Most of the response develops only the benefits of decision-making, while the examples repeat the same point rather than extending the discussion. To strengthen the response, explain why some people worry about children focusing only on their own wishes, then weigh that concern against the benefits and make your position clear in relation to both views. The response contains 9 words copied from the task prompt; these were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an opening, supporting paragraphs and a conclusion, and connectors such as “Further,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help signal stages. However, progression is limited because the two main paragraphs largely repeat the idea that children learn decision-making, and there is no paragraph developing the opposing view. Some links between sentences are unclear: “Their opinion matters in choices taken by parents” is not connected to a specific explanation, while “This indicates” repeatedly announces a conclusion without adding a new step in the argument. Organise the body around distinct points, use each paragraph to develop one view or reason, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant basic vocabulary, including “choices,” “opinion,” “decision making” and “difficulties,” so the general topic remains understandable. However, the range is narrow and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “decisions” and “choices.” There are also spelling and word-choice problems, such as “encurage's,” “Thiis,” “cheir” and “childern,” which reduce accuracy and polish. Some expressions are awkward, including “choices taken by parents” and “take decision.” Build a wider set of natural phrases for discussing independence, responsibility and self-interest, and check spelling and collocations carefully. More precise vocabulary would also help you explain the opposing view rather than relying on repeated general terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the meaning is generally recoverable. Some sentence patterns are controlled, for example, “Later in life when they are grown up and are young teenagers they face difficulties in making…” However, errors recur in sentence construction, articles, agreement and punctuation. For instance, “if the child if below 10 years of age” contains a duplicated verb, and “a boy who's age is 12 years” has an incorrect possessive structure. The opening also joins ideas with full stops and spacing inconsistently, while the example beginning “For example” is awkwardly punctuated. Practise accurate complex sentences with “if,” “because” and “although,” and proofread for complete clauses, articles and sentence boundaries.

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