Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people argues that giving children everyday life decision may result in society of individuals that think about themselfes only, while other believe that it is important for children to make their own decision about the things at affects them. I agree with allowing them to make their own decision because it gives them freedom and a sense of responsibility furthmore develops problem solving skills as well.

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own decision may result in thinking about their wishes only, which is true in some cases. As some children tent to think about themselfes rather than thinking about others as well. Its moslty because they are not trained or groomed by their parents that they sometime should make the decision that is suitalbe for others as well in some circumstances, Like for example if the family is going out and they don't want to go with them but their other sibling wants to then they should scarifice their wish to go out because it would be good for the whole family rather than not wanting to go which may result in disrupting the mood of family. so if they are allowd to make their decison that only benefits them they may only think about themself.

On the other hand, other people argus that it is important for children to make their choices in everyday life. It is important because allowing them would give them freedom and also develops a sense of responsibility too. Because they would make choice without anyone interput but also they would think about the concequences as well like for example if they are buying expensive clothes out of their pocket money they would think for second that it is not necessary as they have use this money for a whole month, which develops responsibility in them. Another think it that they would also develop probelm solving skills as well which will help in the future if we allow to make their own decison. They would what to in difficult situations.

I beleive that its is important for them to make their own decison so that they would feel free and dvevelops their problem solving skills as well however, i think that parents should not give them full authority our their decisons but something make important decision for them or guide them so that they avoids any bad habbit or any selfish desire.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and state a clear opinion: you support children making choices, while arguing that parents should still guide them. The discussion of self-centred behaviour is relevant, and the family outing example illustrates how one child’s preference can affect others. The pocket-money example also supports your point about responsibility. However, some ideas are less fully developed than others: the claim that children develop problem-solving skills is repeated but not explained with a specific situation, and the final qualification about parental guidance could be connected more clearly to the two views. To strengthen the response, explain how children can learn to balance personal preferences with family or social needs, and extend each main reason with a clear explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph presenting concerns about children’s choices, a paragraph supporting those choices, and a concluding opinion. Signposts such as “On the other hand” and “I believe” help readers follow the main direction. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because “as well” and “because” recur, and some references are unclear—for example, “They would what to in difficult situations” does not make the intended point clear. Several sentences also run together, particularly in the first body paragraph, making the example harder to follow. Use clearer sentence boundaries and refer explicitly to the idea being discussed; vary linking expressions and make each paragraph’s central point easy to identify.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “freedom,” “sense of responsibility,” “problem solving skills,” and “consequences.” The examples also show an attempt to express specific situations rather than relying only on general statements. However, the range is limited and some word choices or forms are inaccurate, which can make meaning less clear. For instance, “think about themselfes,” “make their own decision,” and “bad habbit” contain spelling or form problems, while “trained or groomed” is not a natural way to describe teaching children to consider others. Repeated use of “important,” “decision,” and “as well” also limits variety. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including explanations with “because” and examples introduced by “like for example.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “Some people argues” and “allowing them would give them freedom and also develops”; pronouns and sentence construction are also unclear in “They would what to in difficult situations.” There are run-on sentences and punctuation problems, especially where several ideas are joined without clear sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate complex sentences, checking that subjects and verbs agree, and separating complete ideas with full stops. This will make your reasoning easier to follow.

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