Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

some people believe that children should be allowed to make their own choices in the matters that revolve around them. while others argue that providing children with such freedom on everyday matter like clothing and diets would raise a generation of individuals, who are selfish about their own desires. Children are incapable of choosing what's suitable for them and are less likely to be able to differentiate between right and wrong at such a young age. However, i strongly believe that children making their own choices from young age would equip them with decision making and managment skills. Moreover they can make minor mistakes and learn from them with less harm.

Young brains are learning to adopt to the environment and they need constant guidance and supervision. Their sense of right and wrong is built around this age and if they are allowed to choose everything for themselves, they might end up being stubborn or there are high chances that they will not value their parent's decisions when they grow up. For instance if a children chooses his favourite meal everyday that is not beneficial for his health, he is likely to oppose to interferance of his parents as they cannot allow him to put his health at risk. Children can be forced to be obedient if parents realise that they are of track.

On the contrary, children controlled by parents often lack self confidence. Children who make decsision for themselves are likely to learn fast by the outcomes of their own choices. When they pay for their own mistakes, they learn sense of responsibilty. The right decisions gives young brains the confidence in themselves and prepares them to be a more responsible member of society. For instance a child who has given the freedom to wear whatever he likes would start considering what is appropriate and is also likely consider the culture and society before making clothing choices in future.

In conclusion, children can often be exploited by too much freedom at young age but the ability to make decisions from childhood will assist them while making choices at a grown age.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear personal position: you acknowledge that children may misuse freedom, but argue that making choices builds decision-making and responsibility. The examples about choosing meals and clothing are relevant and help explain the contrast. However, some points are asserted rather than fully developed. For example, the claim that children may become stubborn or disregard their parents’ decisions is not explored beyond the meal example, and the conclusion repeats the general position without drawing together the main reasons. To strengthen the response, explain more precisely how parents can balance guidance with age-appropriate choice, and extend each example to show its consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting concerns about freedom, a contrasting paragraph supporting children’s choices, and a conclusion. The progression between the two views is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the contrary” help mark the shift. Some connections are less smooth or precise, however. The opening sentence begins with a lowercase “while” after a full stop, and the final sentence introduces “exploited by too much freedom,” which is not clearly linked to the earlier discussion. Within paragraphs, ideas sometimes move quickly from a claim to an example without explaining the link. Use clearer referencing and add brief explanations between claims and examples.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “decision-making,” “self-confidence,” “sense of responsibility,” and “guidance and supervision.” These choices allow you to discuss both parental control and children’s independence. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “put his health at risk,” though some collocations and word forms are inaccurate or awkward: “adopt to the environment,” “oppose to interference,” and “a more responsible member” in this context. Spelling errors such as “managment,” “decisision,” and “responsibilty” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use familiar expressions precisely, and proofread spelling; this will make your vocabulary more natural and dependable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex structures, including conditional clauses (“if they are allowed to choose everything”) and relative clauses (“Children who make decisions for themselves”). Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “a children chooses,” “The right decisions gives,” and “a child who has given the freedom,” where agreement or verb construction is faulty. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention: “from young age” needs an article, and the opening uses a full stop before a lowercase “while.” These errors do not usually prevent understanding, but they limit control. Review subject–verb agreement, complete verb forms, articles, and capitalization, then check each sentence for a clear grammatical structure.

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