Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

While some people argure that the free will of children to make their own choices in everyday matters like food, clothes and enttertainment may result in society of individuals who does not care about anyone else rather than their own wishes.

On the other hand some people emphazies the importance of children to make their own decisions about their life and matter which affect them.

I largely agree with children having the freedom to make their own choices but only if their parents supervise their decisions and help then in their choices rather than leaving all the matters to their children.

The opinoin of some people who says that children with freedom to make their choices may result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. This statement is partially correct, Only if the parents of the children does not observe their childrens choices and does not guide them.

Only in these rare cases some people can become narcissist type who only cares about themselves. However the chances of these kind of cases are rare becuase most parents supervise theri children and guide them

Children who makes their own decision in their life with the guidance of their parents or guadrians these type of children become self dependent in many things and this also helps in thier upbringing and maturity level. This also reduce the workload on their parents.

Allowing Children to make their own choices in everyday life can train them in many areas like cooking or eating food on their own or chosing clothes to their own liking, washing clothes, pressing clothes. This could also make them much more happy by doing things with their own choices.

to conclude that, in my opinion children should have free will to make their own choices with the help of their parents. This way children could be much more independent and this would help them in their future to make bigger choices properly and be good individual in the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both views and make your own position clear: you support children making choices when parents supervise and guide them. The response also gives relevant examples, such as choosing food and clothes, and explains that decision-making can build independence and maturity. However, the opposing view is treated mainly as a possibility that arises when parents fail to guide children; the concern that choice itself may encourage self-centredness is not explored in much depth. The benefits are also asserted more than demonstrated—for example, the claim that choices reduce parents’ workload needs explanation. Develop each side with a fuller reason or example, and clarify how parental guidance teaches consideration for others. (The length requirement is met; 13 words copied from the prompt were not counted.)

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, discussion of the concern about self-centredness, a paragraph on the benefits of choice, and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “to conclude” help signal these stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes repetitive: the paragraph beginning “The opinion of some people” restates the concern before adding only a brief qualification. Some connections are unclear, particularly “Only in these rare cases,” which does not clearly follow from the preceding sentence. The examples about cooking, eating, and clothing also appear as a list rather than a developed sequence. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “self-dependent,” “guidance,” “maturity,” and “narcissist,” and the reader can generally understand your meaning. There are also attempts to express distinctions, such as “partially correct” and “with the help of their parents.” However, word choice and spelling errors are noticeable, including “argure,” “emphazies,” “opinion,” and “becuase.” Some phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “society of individuals,” “their life and matter,” and “narcissist type.” Repeated use of “choices,” “children,” and “parents” also limits flexibility. Build a more accurate range of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “Only if the parents…,” and your main position is usually understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and clause construction occur across the response. For example, “individuals who does not care” should use a plural verb, while “children who makes” also needs plural agreement. The opening sentence is a fragment, and “Only if…” is not correctly attached to a complete main clause. There are also unclear constructions such as “children with freedom to make their choices may result.” Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement and punctuation when editing.

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