Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

There is a disagreement about whether the children have allowed to make decisions of their own lives that affect on them or hold their rights back because this may result in selfishness. I believe that the children have their own right to make decisions about something that affect on their lives because after all they have to face the consequences.

On the one hand, if children have given full freedom to take decisions of their everyday matters such as clothes, food, gathering, entertainments then it may result in a society of people who only think about their own wishes, nothing else. Somehow its true but if parent apply restrictions on most of their actions then it also cause stress problem, low confidence, weak communication skill and one of vulnerable drawback will be that children will not have enough courage to stand for his own right.

On the other hand, the children feel much more confident and have high moral if they have given independence to deal their matters by own. The often studies showed in their research that students who were given freedom have much more maturity and confident than those one who remained dependent on their parents. Also it helps to train them for future time when they will have to make their all decisions solely and no one will be there to guide them. In addition, in early life, if they make decisions and do some mistakes then their parents are there to guide them which will give them some maturity to how handle difficult matters and then make decisions. I agree that give free hand may result in selfishness but alongside there are so much negative effects that they have to face which will be prevented by giving freedom.

In conclusion, it is really important for children to make decisions that affect on them although, it may result in some serious side effects but if the parents manage their children's decision rights in right manner then it will be prevented.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a consistent opinion: children should make decisions affecting them, with parental guidance to limit possible selfishness. The discussion of restrictions is relevant and includes consequences such as stress and reduced confidence, while the second view is supported with points about maturity and learning from mistakes. This meets the task well, and the position is clear. To develop the response further, explain the ideas with more precise reasoning or a concrete example; for instance, the claim that research shows greater maturity is not supported with a specific illustration. The possible selfishness of unrestricted choice is also acknowledged but explored less fully than the benefits of independence, so the two sides are not equally developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs presenting contrasting views, and a conclusion. The progression from possible drawbacks of unrestricted choice to the benefits of independence is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and some links between ideas are not fully clear. The second body paragraph, for example, moves from confidence to an unsupported reference to studies, then to future decision-making and parental guidance. Grouping these points more deliberately and explaining how each supports your position would make the progression smoother. Check references such as “they” and “those one” so readers can identify who is meant.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “selfishness,” “restrictions,” “confidence,” “maturity,” and “consequences.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and you attempt some less common expressions such as “vulnerable drawback.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which makes parts of the argument less precise: “high moral,” “deal their matters by own,” and “give free hand” are examples. There are also awkward forms such as “entertainments” and “stress problem.” Aim to learn vocabulary in natural phrases and check whether a word fits its context, rather than relying on direct translations. More accurate collocations would improve clarity and help you express the ideas with greater flexibility.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if children have given full freedom … then it may result” and a longer sentence about parents guiding children after mistakes. This shows some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors occur in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction. For example, “the children have allowed” needs a passive form such as “are allowed,” while “if parent apply restrictions … it also cause” has agreement and number problems. The final sentence also needs clearer punctuation around “although.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause, even though the overall meaning remains understandable. Practise building accurate clauses first, especially passive forms and subject–verb agreement, before extending sentences with several linked ideas.

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