Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The importance of children to make their owe choices on everyday matters of the such as food , clothes and entertainment has sperked an on going controversy . some people believe that other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that while others are showing disagreement . This essay will explain the benefits and deawbacks of this trend in forthcoming

To commenc with there are myriad reasons to support the given statement but the foremost one is that matters is everyday such as food, cloth

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response begins to address the topic by referring to children’s choices about food, clothes and entertainment, and it signals an intention to discuss benefits and drawbacks. However, it does not meaningfully explain either viewpoint or give a clear personal opinion; the opening also confuses the two sides rather than setting them out accurately. The only supporting idea is unfinished: “matters is everyday such as food, cloth”. There are no developed reasons or relevant examples, so the task is addressed only minimally. The response contains 76 words, below the required 250; 15 words copied from the prompt were excluded from that count. To improve, state both views clearly, give your own position, and support each main point with explanation and an example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the topic, and “To commence” appears to begin a body paragraph. This gives the reader a small amount of structural guidance. However, the ideas do not progress into a complete discussion, and the final sentence stops mid-thought. The opening is difficult to follow because it repeats “some people believe” and then shifts to “while others are showing disagreement” without clearly identifying the opposing views. The phrase “This essay will explain…” promises a structure that the response does not deliver. Use separate paragraphs for each viewpoint and your opinion, and connect complete ideas with clear references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some topic-related and less common vocabulary, including “controversy,” “benefits and drawbacks,” and “myriad reasons.” These choices show an effort to move beyond very basic wording. However, several spelling and word-choice errors make the message less clear, such as “owe choices,” “sperked,” “deawbacks,” and “cloth.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “the importance of children to make” and “in forthcoming” do not express the intended meaning clearly. The vocabulary range is therefore uneven, with ambitious items alongside basic errors. Prioritise accurate, natural collocations—for example, “children making their own choices” and “in the following paragraphs”—before adding more advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to form longer sentences and use linking structures, as in “Some people believe… while others…,” but the sentence is not successfully controlled. The opening contains incomplete or confusing clause relationships, and “matters is everyday such as food, cloth” lacks a clear grammatical structure. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, including the lower-case “some” after a full stop and inconsistent spacing around punctuation. Because the response is very short and several sentences are unfinished or difficult to parse, it does not demonstrate reliable control across a range of structures. Build accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with “because,” “although,” or “while,” checking that each clause has a subject and verb.

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