Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people argue that accepting children to produce opt for their own on old of the days matters is mostly to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. But other people believe that it is crusal for children to generate their desires about matters that affect that. In my opinion both are essentiol. Because all of children has their own wishes. But there has one advantage and disadvantage.

Childrens own choices are sometimes affortable or favourable and sometimes awful. But we had to give them a chance for their personal desires for their happiness, which are such

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You identify the two contrasting views and state, “In my opinion both are essential,” so the response shows some awareness of the task. However, neither view is explained with a relevant reason or example, and your opinion is not developed; the final sentence, “we had to give them a chance,” begins an idea but does not complete it. The response also does not meet the required minimum of 250 words: it contains 89 words, with 14 words copied from the prompt excluded from the count. As a result, the discussion is only minimal and does not adequately address all parts of the question. Develop each view in a separate paragraph and support your position with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you introduce the two views, give an opinion, and then begin to discuss children’s choices. The contrast marker “But” also signals a change in viewpoint. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the ideas are not developed into clear paragraphs, and the final phrase “which are such” leaves the discussion unfinished. The link between “both are essential” and “one advantage and disadvantage” is also unclear. To improve, use a clear introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion; connect each claim to its explanation with straightforward linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “children,” “choices,” “wishes,” and “matters that affect them,” and you attempt more formal wording such as “favourable.” However, several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the meaning hard to understand: “accepting children to produce opt for their own” does not express the intended idea clearly, while “crusal” and “essentiol” are misspelled. “Affortable” is also not an appropriate word for describing choices in this context. Build accuracy with common topic collocations before attempting more complex phrasing—for example, “allow children to make their own choices” and “decisions about everyday matters.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, including “Some people argue that…” and “But we had to give them a chance…”. However, control is inconsistent, and several sentence patterns are incomplete or difficult to interpret. “In my opinion both are essentiol. Because all of children has their own wishes” separates a dependent reason into a fragment and has an agreement error; “there has one advantage and disadvantage” also uses an incorrect construction. The final clause, “which are such,” is unfinished. Practise joining reasons to the claims they support, checking subject–verb agreement and articles, and completing each sentence with a clear main clause. These changes will make your intended meaning easier to follow.

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