Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Allowing children to make their own choices on every matter is not good.Parents helps them to choose right decisions in every matter.Many people beleive that it is important for childeren to make decisions about matters that effeect them so they are tottly going wrong because childeren did not have understanding about anything about every matters.Some childeren regret their parents words and spoils their life due to wrong decisions.They do not know bout the difference of good or bad.It is good for parents to keep an eye to their childeren to knowing that what they are doing.If they are going to wrong direction so parents must need help them.Some people beleive that allowing children to make their own choice on everyday matter such as foods ,clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes it is good for children but they keeps an eye for their decisions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You express a relevant view that parents should guide children, and you briefly acknowledge the opposing view that children should make decisions about matters affecting them. However, the discussion is very limited: the claim that children “did not have understanding” is not explained or supported with a specific example, and the opposing position is mostly repeated from the prompt rather than developed. Your own position is also unclear at the end, where you say allowing choices “is good for children” but add that parents should monitor decisions. The response contains 130 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum; 27 copied prompt words were excluded from that count. Develop both views, state your position consistently, and support it with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has a basic line of thought: you begin with parental guidance, give reasons for it, and then mention the view in favour of children making choices. Some links are attempted through phrases such as “so” and “If they are going to wrong direction.” However, the ideas run together in one paragraph, and the final sentence combines both positions without clearly showing how they relate. Repeated references to children and decisions also make progression difficult to follow. Separate the two views into paragraphs, use a concluding paragraph to state your opinion, and make each sentence develop one clear point. Clearer links between reasons and examples would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use enough basic topic vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “choices,” “decisions,” “entertainment,” and “regret.” There are also attempts to express ideas such as parental supervision through “keep an eye” and “wrong direction.” However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, including “every matter,” “right decisions,” and “regret their parents words.” Spelling errors such as “beleive,” “childeren,” and “effeect” are frequent and reduce the clarity and accuracy of the writing. Build a more precise range for discussing guidance, independence, and consequences, and check spelling and natural word combinations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can generally identify your main point. You also attempt a conditional structure in “If they are going to wrong direction,” showing some effort to connect ideas grammatically. However, control is inconsistent: “Parents helps” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “they keeps an eye” has the same problem. Other examples include “children did not have understanding” and “parents must need help them,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Punctuation is also weak, with no space after the first full stop and a long final sentence that needs clearer boundaries. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex structures.

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