Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Allowing children to make their on decision in some mater is good at some time but also not in some situations. Firstly parents have to allowingtheir children to make their on choices . Because every child has the write to express their choices . They have to permit their own wright . If parents allowed thair chidren to make thair own decision , then they will be able to make thei decision more better then early.We also help other and also trying to crev the others decision . Then the children able to express the good environment and able to make the good environment.If they make their decision onw then they will be able to make good society and able to give advice to another.

On the other hand if parents allowed their children to make their decision own then they become the addiction of some bad habbits .They eat the bad foods . They become the addicted of drinking . They become the addicted of bad food which is dangerous for our helth. They wear clothes like as which not suits the culture. this type of children spoils the culture and also spoils the sosiety or environment. The factor of food is more dangerous then others such as clothes and environment .

So the cocclusion is that , there is advantages and disadvantages also of allowing the children to make their decision own. So the advantages is more the the disadvatages. So in my openion , parents have to allow their children to make their decision own.When parents allow their childre to make their decision own the children becomes happy. So parents have to allow their children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall preference for allowing children to make choices, and you mention relevant areas such as food, clothing and habits. However, the discussion of the two views is only partial: the first side is supported mainly by repeated claims that children can make decisions and contribute to a good society, while the opposing view is presented largely as a list of possible harms. The task asks you to discuss both views, but the reasons are not explained in enough detail, and there is no specific example to illustrate them. Your position becomes clearest in the conclusion, rather than being consistently developed throughout. Explain how age-appropriate choices build responsibility, and how parental guidance can prevent harmful decisions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an opening paragraph, a contrasting paragraph beginning “On the other hand,” and a conclusion signalled by “So the conclusion is.” These markers help readers identify the broad stages of your answer. However, ideas within the paragraphs do not progress clearly. For example, the first paragraph moves from children’s rights to helping others and creating a good society without showing how these points connect. Repeated use of “So,” “also,” and “then” makes the linking mechanical, and some references, such as “they” in “they will be able to make,” are not always clear. Group each paragraph around one main reason, then explain and illustrate that reason before moving to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “choices,” “decision,” “culture,” “society,” and “advantages and disadvantages,” so the general topic is understandable. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “make their decision own” and “addicted.” There are also frequent spelling and word-choice problems, such as “mater,” “wright,” “helth,” and “sosiety,” which can make the reader pause. Some combinations are unnatural, including “permit their own wright” and “the addicted of drinking.” Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing autonomy, parental guidance, responsibility and harmful habits, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple patterns, and you attempt some longer clauses with “if,” “because” and “when.” However, these attempts are often inaccurate, and frequent errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “parents have to allowing their children” has an incorrect verb form, while “If parents allowed … then they will be able” mixes conditional forms. Other problems include missing or misplaced articles and possessives, as in “make their on decision,” and unclear sentence construction in “Then the children able to express the good environment.” Use straightforward, complete sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms; then practise accurate conditional sentences and punctuation.

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