Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some people believe that children should have freedom of selection of daily matters like food, clothes and entertainment as this would encourage selfish persons in society, on the other hand, the opponents of this thought that liberty of selection daily life matters of children bestow them with decision making skill. I partially agree with the statment of allowing youths to make their own slection in their needs and suggest that children should be permiited to make decision in certain matters but not all.

While discssing the liberty of students in making their own choices make them confident and satisfied. This freedom enables them to handle their routine matters confidentally and accurately. The youth has to face many challenging situations in practical life, then this capability of free choice enables them to face this demaded circumstances with bravely and elegentaly. Their confidance of taking independent decision will enable them to step forwad and tackle the situation without waiting for help.

On the contrary, giving full freedom in all matters of life make them selfisn and self centered. They adopt habit of giving importance of themselves ignoring the preferances of other. Such young men priortize their own wishes. This awkward attitude is not benficial for the health of blance society.

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You present a relevant, partly qualified position: children should make decisions “in certain matters but not all.” You also address both views, explaining that choice can build confidence and that unrestricted freedom may encourage self-centred behaviour. However, the discussion is only partially developed: the benefits are asserted rather than illustrated, and the concern about selfishness is not supported with a specific example or explanation of how it affects others. The final sentence, “there is need to balnce approach to handle this mate,” is incomplete, so your opinion is not brought to a clear conclusion. The response also falls 32 words short of the required minimum. Develop each view with a concrete example and finish with a complete, direct conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting children’s choices, a contrasting paragraph, and an attempted conclusion. Transitions such as “On the contrary” help signal the change in viewpoint. However, progression is limited, and the final paragraph is cut off, leaving the argument without a completed ending. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly the opening sentence, which joins the two views with a comma and “on the other hand.” The ideas within paragraphs also repeat similar points about confidence and self-centredness rather than advancing through explanation or examples. Use clearer sentence boundaries, organise each body paragraph around one developed reason, and complete the conclusion so the overall progression is easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “decision making skill,” “independent decision,” “self-centered,” and “balance society.” These choices show an effort to express abstract ideas, but inaccurate spelling and word choice are frequent enough to distract the reader: examples include “confidentally,” “demaded,” “elegentaly,” “preferances,” and “benficial.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “freedom of selection of daily matters” and “health of blance society,” which make your meaning less precise. Aim for common, accurate collocations before choosing more ambitious wording—for example, “make everyday choices,” “develop decision-making skills,” and “a balanced society.” Proofreading spelling and checking phrases in context would make your ideas clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast between the two views and a conditional idea about freedom and selfishness. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some relationships difficult to follow. For example, “While discssing the liberty of students in making their own choices make them confident” lacks a clear grammatical subject, while “giving full freedom in all matters of life make them” has a subject–verb agreement error. The opening sentence also runs two independent ideas together without suitable punctuation. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries. Shorter, accurate sentences will help communicate your argument reliably.

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