Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Many people believe childs should have their own life choices and others believe if that happens then maybe it will lead us to a selfish society. Both arguments are strong. I believe, it is important to set some sort of guidelines for childrens as they are topically lacks the knowledge of healthy foods, fasion and what kind of entertainment is appropriate for his culture and society.

Firstly, I want to discuss the argument where many believe childrens should make their own choices in everyday matters. Here a children learns to take responsibility of their choices which is a good thing. Besides they will not feel controlled in this system. It will build self-confidence and self-dependence in them.

On the other hand, according to the second argument, a child normally does not know about his society deeply, doesn't understand what is healthy for him also they don't have proper clothing sense. As they don't understand the independent nature of society, the choices they make will be mostly selfish Which will ultimately lead us to a society of individuals where no one cares about others.

In my perspective, childhood is the learning and developing period of our life. Failure have a significant rule in our learning process. So, childs will make their own choices, some choices will be wrong and they will learn from it. However, if their is no one to tell them what is good for them or at least inform them about the society they are living in and their sorroundings then how they will be able to make a choice properly. So, I think their must be a guide for them, like their parents.

In conclusion, both arguments have their own merit. Children needs to make their own choices for long run. But it is also important to provide them certain knowledge and restrict them from some deleterious food for a certain amount of time until they have a proper understanding of the society, the culture and also themselves.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both views and give a clear position: children should make choices, but with parental guidance. The benefits of choice are relevantly identified as responsibility, confidence and independence, while the opposing view is linked to limited knowledge and possible self-centredness. Your final paragraph also explains that mistakes can be part of learning. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For example, the claim that children’s choices will be “mostly selfish” needs a clearer link between everyday decisions and disregard for others. The discussion of the first view is also less developed than the concerns about guidance. Extend each main idea with a specific example and explain how it supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, your own perspective, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “Firstly,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” helps readers follow the discussion. The progression is generally logical, although the distinction between the second view and your own opinion becomes blurred: the paragraph beginning “On the other hand” presents concerns, while the next paragraph introduces your position but repeats some of those concerns. Some references are also unclear, such as “if that happens,” which could refer more explicitly to children making choices. Use topic sentences that distinguish each viewpoint and connect ideas with clearer references, rather than relying mainly on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to discuss the topic, including “self-confidence,” “self-dependence,” “responsibility,” and “significant.” There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “deleterious food” and “appropriate for his culture and society.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “topically lacks the knowledge” does not express the intended meaning, and “Failure have a significant rule” appears to confuse “role” with “rule.” Spelling errors such as “fasion” and “sorroundings,” along with inconsistent forms such as “childs,” also affect control. Choose familiar, accurate expressions first, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if there is no one to tell them what is good for them” and a relative clause in “a society of individuals where no one cares about others.” Meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “childs should,” “Children needs,” and “Failure have,” where subject–verb agreement or plural forms are incorrect. There are also problems with articles and sentence construction, as in “a children learns,” and punctuation is inconsistent, particularly around commas and capitalisation after “selfish.” Practise accurate plural nouns and agreement, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb. More consistent accuracy would strengthen the varied structures you already attempt.

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