Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In modren times all parents provides their children with every useful things as well as parents look after every matters of their children.Morever, respected children fully rely on their parents communication.Today every individuals enjoy their life without any barrier it's good for new generation but parents should take care of their childrens every necessary matters. However some people think that parents should allows their children make personal decision without any involvement of parents in various matter such as eating,clothing,entertainments with their friends it's natural but make sure that they not involve in bad habits.Parents always make better decision for their child's future. Most of parents think that when they allows their children to free hands in every matter then they pushed in another depth.In pratical life every teenager should enjoy their life with their own decision.Thus, some people argue that if they give permission to their children in every matter they involved in many harmful habits and many other bad things so the basic need is that we should look after the every matter and every decision furthermore, when they reached at adolsecense then parenst allowed their children to make their basic matter not for their future plan. In my future life I would make make my children life decision when they are immature.after, this I would allowed to my childrens to make their own mind plans. Parenst did want their child involve in bad habits as well as they make better decision for their child's life . But today generation do not remeber their parents deeply and make voilence in their parents decision.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both perspectives: you mention parents making decisions to protect children from harmful habits, and the view that teenagers should make choices for themselves. Your own position appears in the statement that you would decide for your children while they are immature and later allow them to make their own plans. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The reasons for children’s independence and the possible effects of parental control are not clearly explained, and examples remain general rather than showing how everyday choices build responsibility or selfishness. The final claim about young people forgetting their parents and becoming violent is abrupt and not connected convincingly to the question. Develop each view with a clear reason and a relevant example, then state your position consistently.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to move from parental responsibility to children’s independence and then to your own opinion, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Thus,” and “In my future life” signal these shifts. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the main stages of the discussion are difficult to distinguish. Ideas often run together, and connections between them are unclear—for example, the point about teenagers making decisions is followed by a warning about harmful habits without explaining the relationship. Several transitions are also used mechanically, while references such as “they” do not always make clear whether you mean parents or children. Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and make each sentence build directly on the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “personal decision,” “harmful habits,” “future,” and “adolescence,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “free hands” does not naturally express giving children freedom, and “make their basic matter” is unclear. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “modren,” “pratical,” and “adolsecense.” Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More accurate phrases such as “make everyday choices,” “parental guidance,” and “develop independence” would help express your ideas clearly without relying on repeated general words like “matter” and “decision.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, using clauses introduced by “when,” “if,” and “that,” as well as some simple statements. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “all parents provides,” “parents should allows,” and “when they allows their children,” where the subject and verb do not agree. The sentence beginning “In modren times” also runs several ideas together without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with one clear subordinate clause. Check subject–verb agreement and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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