Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

A few individuals argue that parents giving freedom to their children to choose their everyday needs as a results in they only thinking for their own lives rather than the surrounding environment. While other counterclaim that it is to beneficial for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. In my opinion, making decision is very helpful for children to develop their abilities. I will explain both views in the upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples.

First and foremost, if children have a access for choosing their needs it helps to become a decision maker. To elaborate, in the early age parents should be encourage their children who independently choose their foods, drinks, wear favourite clothes and also select their interesting filed. As a result, it introduce certain type of life situations and it helps to individuals become a stronger and smarter. Secondly, individuals have various experiences. To explain, during the choosing think people experience good ways as well as negative ways. For this reason, In the future people can easily make a decision because of their experience.

On the other hand, individuals only think for their own needs is negative affect on society like sometimes they become a aggresive. They often rejected others view, because they believe other people can interfire for their own life and dose not allowing to them. In addition, this selfishness destroystrust in a community. They always avoid other prespective. Consequently, people also ignore them.

In conclusion, although freely atmosphere it improve their decision ability as well as give kids of experience. However, it become self obsses and people can ignore this type of people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a relevant opinion—that making choices helps children develop—and you discuss both the benefits of decision-making and the concern that children may become self-centred. However, the two sides are not addressed equally clearly. The benefits are explained through independence and learning from experience, while the opposing view is described mainly as a possible consequence, without explaining why everyday choices might encourage selfishness or giving a concrete example. Your position is stated in the introduction, but the conclusion becomes unclear: “it become self obsses” does not clearly express your final view. Develop each side with a specific example and restate your opinion clearly at the end. The response meets the stated length requirement; the 10 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the broad direction of your argument. You also use signposts such as “First and foremost,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, and some links feel mechanical or unclear. For example, “For this reason, In the future people can easily make a decision” does not clearly connect the experience described to the claim. The conclusion also introduces an unclear final point rather than neatly summarising your position. Use clearer links between each claim and its explanation, and make pronouns such as “it” refer unmistakably to an idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “decision maker,” “independently,” “selfishness,” and “community,” and you use some topic-related expressions such as “matters that affect them.” However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning unclear. Phrases such as “a access for choosing their needs,” “interesting filed,” and “self obsses” do not communicate your intended ideas precisely. There are also spelling errors, including “aggresive,” “interfire,” and “prespective.” Aim to learn vocabulary in natural combinations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for independence, self-centred behaviour, and the consequences for relationships would help you express the argument more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional and cause-and-effect structures, as in “if children have…” and “because they believe…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “parents should be encourage their children” needs a different verb form, while “it helps to individuals become” has an incorrect construction. The opening sentence also combines clauses in a way that obscures the relationship between the two views. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea and a clearly formed supporting clause. Check subject–verb agreement and article use, then proofread each sentence for a complete, logical structure.

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