Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Indubitably, changes are permanent in life.Some of these are rosy while others are thorny . The topic is related to bog change by witnessed by the society in the context of children have their own rights to do something in their while others said its take the decision in hood way. In this essay i will discyboth points of view in suitable conclusion.

To commence with,with the regards of children who hive their own decisions its good for the chold development. They are more confident to make thier decisions its is not difficult for them to face any kind of the menace in thier entire life becomes yhry already learn the skills in early age.To easy tackle all the situations.For example, teengers who make thier own decisions which is lucrative in life then take good decisions for their future as well as if they fail they learned from their mistakes.

On the other hand, some of argue of this notion.They think that if the kids make own rigts it will impact on future. they will become selfish and not care about the parents. which leads negative impact on thier personality.They will be bad decision makers. that thing imoact whole life .for instance 70% of the melbone studemts take thier decision they do wrong things in life.

In conclusion, it is logically concluded that the pros of this notion outplay the cons by its miles It should be prompted accepted and adopted by the society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You discuss both perspectives and state a clear preference in the conclusion: children’s freedom to decide is beneficial overall. The first body paragraph gives relevant reasons, including confidence and learning from mistakes, while the second recognises concerns about selfishness and poor decisions. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because these ideas are brief and not fully explained; the claim about “70% of the melbone studemts” is unclear and unsupported. Your opening also does not clearly introduce the specific issue, and the conclusion asserts that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks without weighing them in detail. The response is 244 words, six words below the required minimum. Develop each view with a clear explanation and a relevant, credible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion. The signposts “To commence with” and “On the other hand” help readers identify the shift between arguments, and the conclusion returns to your position. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are compressed or linked unclearly. For example, “To easy tackle all the situations” is detached from the preceding sentence, while “that thing imoact whole life” does not clearly connect the claim to its consequence. Some transitions are mechanical, and the opening does not establish a clear line of argument. Use complete sentences, connect each reason to its explanation, and make references such as “that thing” precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related and less common vocabulary, including “confident,” “menace,” “lucrative,” and “selfish,” and you use contrastive phrases to present the two views. However, the range is limited and many word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “bog change,” “take the decision in hood way,” and “pros of this notion outplay the cons by its miles” are unclear or unnatural. Misspellings such as “chold,” “thier,” and “studemts” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, natural expressions rather than ornate wording: for example, say that children “develop confidence” or “learn from their mistakes.” Proofread carefully and choose vocabulary whose meaning you can control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about children making decisions and learning from failure. However, the range is limited, and attempts at complex structures are often faulty, so readers must work to interpret several sentences. For example, “They are more confident to make thier decisions its is not difficult for them to face…” joins clauses without correct punctuation or structure. The opening sentence also has a missing space after the full stop, and “some of argue” lacks a grammatical subject structure. Sentence boundaries, articles, and clause construction need more consistent control. Practise writing one clear main clause at a time, then add subordinate clauses with accurate connectors and punctuation.

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