Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people argue that allowing children to take their own decisions on daily needs (such as meals, dressing and enjoyment) is probably to results in a community of people who just believe about their own admires. The opposing group of people consider that it is necessary for adults to make choices about affairs that impact on them. Although if young people make their own choices, they may ignore their parent's advices and will create a selfish society. I believe that, young adults can be abled to take their own decisions because they learn responsibilities and confidence.

On the one hand, if we allow children to choose a step for their daily problems such as food, clothes and entertrainment then they may ignore their guardians advices, experiences and abilites because they have lack of confidence. Moreover, in this way they can create a selfish society , many young adults not known how the results will be occurs because they are less responsible, and they spread negative effects on populations. For example, children who are given freedom without proper parental supervision may spend time outdoors with negative peer groups and develop undesirable habits, while neglecting their parents' advice and family rules. As a result, they may destroy their future career and adopts bad habbits.

On the other hand, many people enable their children to take their decisons independently and freely because they think that they build their confidence level and learn who they can fullfill their wishes on their behalf. Additinally, they can learn from their mistakes and understand the results of their decisions,when children given the opportunity to select their clothes and food and also place for refreshment, they learn their own preference and understand the sequences of their choices. Therefore, young children are be abled to select educational institute for their further studies because they can learn different skills such as problem-solving and customer services from their professional and experienced tutors, that have significant

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both views and state your position: the first paragraph says children may become selfish, while your opinion is that making choices helps them develop responsibility and confidence. The examples about parental supervision and choosing food or clothes are relevant. However, the discussion is only partly developed. The claim that children’s freedom creates a selfish society is asserted rather than explained, and the point about choosing an educational institute shifts beyond the everyday decisions in the prompt. The response also ends with an unfinished idea (“that have significant”), so your final position is not fully brought together. Develop each side with a clear explanation and a specific, relevant example, then conclude by directly answering the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph beginning “On the one hand,” and another beginning “On the other hand.” These markers help readers identify the two perspectives, and examples generally follow the points they illustrate. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: several claims are joined together without clear explanation, and the final paragraph stops mid-sentence, leaving the argument without a proper conclusion. Some linking is mechanical, with repeated “Moreover,” “Additionally,” and “Therefore,” while references such as “in this way” do not always make the connection between ideas clear. Organise each paragraph around one main claim, explain it before adding an example, and finish with a concise conclusion that restates your view.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “parental supervision,” “problem-solving,” “preferences,” and “responsibilities.” These choices show an effort to discuss consequences and child development. However, the range is limited by frequent inaccurate word choice, collocation, word forms, and spelling, which sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “their own admires” does not express the intended idea, and “take their own decisions” is an unnatural collocation. Other errors include “entertrainment,” “abilites,” “decisons,” and “habbits.” Aim for accurate, natural phrases rather than more elaborate wording: use “make their own decisions,” “self-centred,” and “develop bad habits.” Proofread spelling and check unfamiliar expressions in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if we allow children to choose” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction can make the argument hard to follow. Examples include “is probably to results,” “many young adults not known,” “when children given the opportunity,” and “children are be abled.” The opening also uses “Although” without completing a contrasting main clause. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly around commas and spaces. Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a correctly formed subordinate clause, then check subject–verb agreement and verb patterns before adding further ideas.

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