Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people belive that allowing childern to make their own choices on everyday matters like food, clothes and entertainment is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important foe childern to make decisions about matters that effect them. From my everyday experience and observation I belive that it may be more benifical that childern to make their own choices on everyday matters. Other people believe that it is important for childern to make decisions about matters that harmful for them. I think this is not everyday wrong.

First of all, some people believe that allowing childern to make their own choices on every day matters, I think this work is more and more perfect for childern because if he gets loss one time so next time he becomes much more careful about his mistakes, which is more important for childerns future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a relevant opinion—that children making everyday choices may be beneficial—and begin to explain that mistakes can help them become more careful. However, the response does not adequately discuss both views: the concern that children may become self-centred is only repeated from the prompt, and the opposing view is not explained. The point about decisions concerning matters that are harmful to children is unclear and unsupported. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words; 51 words copied from the prompt were not counted. As a result, the task is addressed only minimally, with ideas too limited and under-developed to fulfil the discussion and support your position. Develop each view with reasons and relevant examples, then state your opinion clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening paragraph introduces the topic and your opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “First of all” that gives one reason. This provides some structure, but the progression is limited because the essay ends before the discussion is developed. The opening repeats much of the task wording, and the sentence about decisions “that harmful for them” does not connect clearly to the preceding point. “First of all” also suggests that further points will follow, but none are provided. Use separate paragraphs to explain each viewpoint and your own position, and connect each reason to an example. Clearer referencing and a more complete sequence of ideas would make the response easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “everyday matters,” “choices,” “mistakes,” and “future.” However, the range is narrow and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “childern” and “believe.” Spelling errors such as “belive,” “benifical,” and “childerns” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Some expressions are also imprecise: “this work is more and more perfect” does not clearly convey that making choices can be beneficial, while “matters that harmful for them” is not a natural way to express the idea. Build a more precise range for discussing responsibility, independence, and consequences, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and a longer conditional explanation, as in “if he gets loss one time so next time he becomes much more careful.” This shows an effort to connect a possible experience with its consequence, and the overall meaning can often be understood. However, the response relies heavily on basic sentence patterns, and the longer construction is not controlled: the conditional clause and “so” are awkwardly combined, and the pronoun reference shifts from children to “he.” There are also errors in sentence structure, such as “it may be more benifical that childern to make,” and in the phrase “matters that harmful for them.” Practise accurate clauses with “if,” “because,” and “which,” and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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