Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

With new generations arising, the debate of whether giving children the freedom of choice in everyday matters is increasing. Many argue that allowing kids to make their choices might make them more self-centered and apathetic while others believe it is important for children to make their own decisions. I agree with the former but I do agree that children should have a say in matters that concerns them.

On the one hand, allowing childre to make their own choices on everyday matters might make a child more self-centered. For example, if parents were to comply to every request made by their children the child may never learn the importance of making sacrifices. Additionally, with children having access to many forms of social media from a young age they may get influenced by other people's dressing habits or behaviour which may cause a negative impact. For instance, many young girls have started doing their makeup and dressing inappropiately after watching influencers do the same.

Morever, if children are allowed to make all their own decisions they make become less understanding and only care about their personal needs. Children should to be taught to be considerate of others rather than only caring about their decisions.

On the other hand, other people believe it is equally important for children to have a say in decisions about matters that affect them. In today's generations, children are becoming more self conscious so there are a number of topics that they might be sensitive towards. It is important that parents are aware of this and let children make decisions regarding those matters. For example, a South Asian child may feel like they might get bullied for applying henna on their hands in a foreign country. Under those circumstances, it is important to leave the ultimate decision up-to the child as they will be affected by it.

In conclusion, I believe parents should have some say in choices on everyday matters but in situations where the decision will affect the child directly, they should have the final say.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both views and give a clear position: you support parental guidance on everyday choices while allowing children the final say when a decision directly affects them. The examples about social-media influence and the South Asian child considering henna make the discussion relevant. However, the first view is developed more fully than the case for children’s autonomy, and some claims need clearer explanation. For instance, the henna example illustrates sensitivity to possible bullying, but you could explain more directly how letting the child decide builds agency or protects their wellbeing. The conclusion also introduces a useful distinction between parental input and the child’s final say, which could be stated more consistently in the body. Develop both sides with more balanced reasoning and precise support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, arguments for each view, and a conclusion. Paragraphing helps the reader follow the shift between positions, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” make the organisation easy to recognise. The progression within the first viewpoint is less smooth, however: the paragraph about social media is followed by a separate short paragraph beginning “Moreover,” which repeats the concern about self-centredness rather than extending the example. Some links between ideas are also broad, so the relationship between children’s choices and the claimed effects could be made more explicit. Combine closely related points and use clearer references and transitions to create a more continuous argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including “self-centered,” “making sacrifices,” “sensitive,” and “ultimate decision.” These choices help communicate the main ideas, and the examples are generally understandable. There are some inaccurate or awkward word choices and collocations, such as “the debate … is increasing,” “comply to every request,” and “a negative impact,” which reduce precision. Spelling slips such as “appropiately” and “Morever” also affect the accuracy of the vocabulary. Aim for more natural academic phrasing and check spelling carefully. For example, describe the debate as “growing” or “increasingly prominent,” and use “comply with” or “give in to” when discussing parents responding to requests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “if parents were to comply…” and subordinate clauses explaining consequences. Most meaning remains clear, but some grammatical errors occur. In “matters that concerns them,” the verb should agree with the plural “matters”; “they make become” also contains an incorrect verb form, and “Children should to be taught” uses an unnecessary “to.” There are also occasional problems with articles and sentence control, as in “allowing childre to make their own choices might make a child.” Review subject–verb agreement, modal verb patterns, and proofreading for small errors. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen the response.

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