Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this to express my gratitude for your incredible service at the event.

Firstly, I was responsible for organising diwali party at my office. Since your property is well-known for its hospitality and food, I suggested your premises to my manager. They appriciated me for choosing busget friendly hotel, yet five star property for an event.

Specifically, the whole process was extremly convenient. I booked one month in advance and your staff provided a simple list regarding the decoration, food and music. Futhermore, on the day of a celebration everyone loves food, as it was healthy and delicious. Perticularly, your staff was very polite and proffesional, which made our experience even more special.

However, clod drinks were quite warm, which was quite frustrating. Moreover, I requested for ice cubes, but i was told that refridgerator was not functionining on that day. Apart from that, everything was high quality.

I will definately give you best review to your hotel, I look forward to visit this place again.

Thank you for your great service.

kindly,

Harsh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points and maintain a clear, appropriate purpose: you explain that you organised a Diwali party for your office, describe the hotel’s convenient booking process, food and staff, and identify the warm soft drinks and unavailable refrigerator as problems. These details make the letter relevant and give the manager a clear account of your experience. Your positive and negative comments are supported with specific examples, such as booking a month ahead and asking for ice. To make the response more fully developed, explain briefly how the warm drinks affected the event or suggest a practical improvement, such as checking cooling equipment before functions. The closing also communicates your intention to return, though a more direct request for the hotel to address the issue would strengthen the purpose.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: you introduce the event, describe what worked well, raise a concern, and close with thanks and future intentions. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “However” help readers follow the shift from praise to criticism. The details within each section are generally connected, particularly the explanation that the refrigerator was not working after you requested ice. Some linking is a little mechanical, and “Apart from that, everything was high quality” repeats the positive evaluation rather than adding a new point. You could improve flow by linking the event details more naturally and ending the complaint paragraph with a concise, specific suggestion for preventing the problem at future events.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for a formal service letter, including “hospitality,” “convenient,” “professional,” and “frustrating.” These choices communicate your experience clearly, and phrases such as “five star property” show an attempt to be precise. However, spelling errors are noticeable, including “appriciated,” “busget,” “extremly,” “Perticularly,” and “definately.” There are also some awkward or inaccurate expressions, such as “simple list regarding” and “give you best review,” which reduce naturalness. Aim to check spelling carefully and learn common collocations as complete phrases—for example, “provide a list of options” and “leave a positive review.” This would make your vocabulary more accurate and idiomatic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including the reason clause “Since your property is well-known…” and the relative clause “which made our experience even more special.” Most of the message remains understandable, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms are frequent enough to affect accuracy. For example, “I look forward to visit this place again” needs a gerund after “look forward to,” and “I will definitely give you best review” is missing an article. In “on the day of a celebration everyone loves food,” the article and phrasing make the sentence structure unclear. Review articles, verb patterns, and sentence boundaries, then proofread each sentence for a complete and natural grammatical structure.

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