Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you about recent event organized by company at your hotel.

The event topic was new technology launch by company so they give information basically it was a launch event i helped company to choose hotel and everything i saw your hotel i loved environment and service I tried your service before so i liked it and then i talked to hotel manager fixed date company also like hotel service , staff behavior and specially hygiene so everyone praised me and hotel also so overall it was good experience.

Hotel needs some improvement in some areas like parking is main issue everybody park vehicle in different complex or roads because you have limited parking so please look into this and expand your parking area . Another thing you need to work on is decoration is not up to the mark so please improve this services.

Thank you for your time and consideration . I look forward to your response.

Your faithfully,

Nisarg Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain that the event was a company technology launch, praise the hotel’s environment, service, staff and hygiene, and identify parking and decoration as areas to improve. The purpose of writing is clear, and the suggestions are relevant. However, some details are less fully developed than others. For example, the event description gives little information about its scale or what took place, while the praise is broad and does not include a specific example of good service. The improvement requests would also be more useful if you explained their effect on guests and proposed a practical solution. A more formal salutation and closing would better suit a letter to a hotel manager.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an opening purpose, a paragraph about the event and positive features, a paragraph on improvements, and a closing. This helps the reader identify the main points. However, progression within the long second paragraph is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together without clear sentence boundaries. The sequence from choosing the hotel to the company’s praise could be separated into shorter, logically ordered sentences. The transition to the suggestions is clear, but phrases such as “Another thing” are basic, and “so” is repeated. Use paragraphing to separate the event details from your evaluation, and connect ideas with more precise references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “technology launch,” “parking,” “staff behavior,” and “hygiene.” Some choices are appropriate to a formal complaint or feedback letter, such as “look into this.” However, the range is limited and several phrases are vague or unnatural, including “event topic,” “everything,” “decoration is not up to the mark,” and “improve this services.” Repetition of “hotel,” “service,” and “liked” also limits variety. Choose more precise expressions for the event and the hotel’s facilities, and check collocations and word forms. For example, describe the “event” rather than its “topic,” and refer to “decor” or “the venue’s decoration” rather than “decoration” in this construction.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the reader can generally understand the intended message. However, the long sentence beginning “The event topic was…” contains several clauses joined without appropriate punctuation, making the relationships between ideas unclear. There are also errors in articles and verb forms, as in “about recent event organized by company” and “so they give information.” Agreement and number are inconsistent in “company also like” and “improve this services.” The closing phrase “Your faithfully” also shows difficulty with the possessive form. Build accuracy by writing one main idea per sentence, checking subject–verb agreement and articles, and using full stops and commas to mark clause boundaries.

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