Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir/ Madam,

I am Writting to show my appreciation for the services rendered by the hotel during my company's 20th annual festival. The event is always carried out every last day of the month of December to celebrate all the staffs for a wonderful job done.

The event was organized for 100 people and i was amazed how the hotel staffs handled the whole event, i would say i was so impressed by how everything was organized, and also the environment was in good condition and neatly arranged .

I would want to make a little recommendation that i feel the hotel needs improvements, i notices the hotel lack adequate hands and the receptionist was a bit harsh to some guest and some of the staffs was also sluggish,but the overall performance was bad after all.

I hope to visit your hotel again during our yearly annual events , thanks for your time and cooperation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you identify the company’s annual event, describe positive features of the hotel, and offer suggestions for improvement. The details that it was the company’s 20th annual festival for 100 people give the letter a clear context. Your praise of the organisation and environment is relevant, but it is not fully specific, and the improvement section is less clear: you mention inadequate staffing and a receptionist’s manner, then say the overall performance was “bad after all,” which conflicts with your earlier praise. Explain how these issues affected the event and make the overall evaluation consistent. A clearer, more fully developed account of each point would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable progression from the event details to praise, suggestions, and a closing, and the ideas are grouped into paragraphs. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement. Some links between ideas are less effective, however. The second paragraph joins several points in one long sentence, while “I would want to make a little recommendation” does not lead smoothly into the criticism. The final claim that performance was “bad after all” also disrupts the progression from positive comments to constructive suggestions. Use clearer paragraphing and transitions, and separate the hotel’s strengths from the specific problems so the relationship between each point is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the event and your evaluation, including “appreciation,” “organized,” “recommendation,” and “cooperation.” However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which limits precision: “annual festival” may not clearly convey a company celebration, “adequate hands” is not a natural way to describe staffing, and “the overall performance was bad after all” is unclear and inconsistent with the praise. There are also spelling and form errors such as “Writting,” “notices,” and “staffs.” Choose more natural expressions and check spelling and word forms; this will make the letter sound more professional and its meaning more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, especially in agreement, articles, capitalization, and sentence boundaries. For example, “all the staffs” and “some of the staffs was” have problems with plural nouns and subject–verb agreement; “i” should be capitalized, and “the hotel lack” needs a verb form that agrees with its subject. The sentence beginning “The event was organized for 100 people” also runs several ideas together, making the structure difficult to control. Practise accurate agreement and build longer sentences with clear clauses and punctuation.

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