Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to share my experience in your hotel for a celebration party.

It was a Diwali celebration of my company which was held two days ago. This event includes games, music and food.

My team members and I was totally impressed by the decoration . A variety of food options available for vegetarian, non -vegetarian and gluten-free guests.Moreover, proper cleanliness and hygiene impressed us. Also , their is a small arrangement to workship goddess Laxmi.

But we face some difficulities too. The main difficulity was limited parking space. Because of this problem my team members had to park their vehicles to the next street. The next problem is limited washrooms and team members had face difficulity for this too. I hope you will look at this problems .

Kind rewards,

Taran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three requested points: you identify the event as your company’s Diwali celebration, mention the decoration, food choices, cleanliness and worship arrangement, and describe problems with parking and washrooms. The purpose of writing is clear, but several details are only briefly stated; for example, the event is said to include “games, music and food” without explaining its scale or how the hotel supported it. The improvement requests are relevant, though “I hope you will look at this problems” does not specify what action you want the manager to take. The response also falls 15 words short of the required minimum, so it needs further development. Add a little detail about the event and make the requested improvements explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible order: you introduce the purpose and event, describe positive features, and then move to the difficulties. This gives the letter a coherent overall arrangement. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Also,” and “Because of this problem” help show how points relate, and the contrast signalled by “But” is understandable. To make the progression more polished, separate the positive feedback and improvement suggestions into clear paragraphs, and avoid stacking several points in one block. Some links are mechanical or awkward, such as “Also” followed by “Moreover,” while “this problems” makes the reference unclear. A more explicit transition, such as “However, there were two areas that could be improved,” would guide the reader smoothly into the final points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “celebration party,” “decoration,” “vegetarian,” “gluten-free,” “parking space,” and “washrooms.” These choices make the main message understandable and show some range beyond very basic wording. However, the vocabulary is sometimes imprecise or incorrectly formed, and spelling errors are noticeable: “difficulities,” “workship,” and “Kind rewards.” Phrases such as “a small arrangement to workship goddess Laxmi” and “limited washrooms” are not natural in this context. Aim for accurate, conventional collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe a “prayer area” and say that the hotel had “insufficient restroom facilities.” This would make the feedback sound clearer and more appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Your response communicates its main points using mostly short, direct sentences, and you attempt some longer structures, such as “Because of this problem my team members had to park their vehicles to the next street.” However, errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction occur often enough to affect fluency. For example, “My team members and I was” should use a plural verb, and “This event includes” would be more consistent in the past tense as “included.” The sentence “A variety of food options available…” is missing a finite verb, while “team members had face difficulity” needs a different verb structure. Practise combining accurate simple sentences with controlled complex ones, and proofread punctuation and spacing, including the extra spaces before full stops.

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