Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my experience about organized an event at hotel. Overall my experience was great and I enjoyed lot and I also learn so many things which definitely would help me in my future. So this event is all about new products which we add on recently specially for women regarding skincare. I like everything about that hotel expect food services Because when i tried the food itt was totally tasteless which make my mood spoil.So i want please improve and adress the concern.

I am looking forward to hearing you.

Thanks

sincerely,

Husan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the event as a launch or presentation of new skincare products for women, and you mention both a positive impression of the hotel and a concern about its food. However, the task is only partially addressed: the event details are very brief, what you particularly liked is not specified, and the improvement request is limited to asking the hotel to address the food. The response also falls 49 words short of the required minimum, leaving little room to develop the points. To make the letter more complete, explain the event’s purpose or attendance, name specific hotel features you appreciated, and describe how the food service could improve.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: you introduce your reason for writing, describe the event, give feedback about the hotel, and close politely. This basic organisation helps the reader follow your message. However, most information is compressed into one paragraph, and the transition from your general experience to the event details is abrupt. The repeated use of “So” and the long run-on section beginning “I like everything” make the relationship between ideas less clear. Use separate paragraphs for the event and your feedback, and connect each point more deliberately—for example, explain what you liked before introducing the food-service concern.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “event,” “new products,” “skincare,” and “food services,” so the main topic is understandable. However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural, such as “express my experience about organized an event,” “enjoyed lot,” and “make my mood spoil.” “I like everything” is also too general to communicate a specific positive feature. Choose more precise phrases such as “share feedback about the event,” “enjoyed the occasion,” and “the meal was disappointing.” Check spelling and capitalisation as well, including “address” and “I,” to make the letter more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your response communicates its basic message through mostly simple sentence patterns, and you attempt to link ideas with “because” and “which.” However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries sometimes make the writing difficult to read. For example, “about organized an event at hotel” lacks a suitable verb pattern and article, while “which make my mood spoil” has problems with agreement and clause construction. The sentence beginning “I like everything” also runs into the next idea without clear punctuation. Practise accurate past-tense forms and build shorter, complete sentences before attempting longer clauses.

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