Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to express my appericiation for the good service and food during our company's annual event that was recently oragnised at Taj palace, Delhi.

To begin with, our company orgainsed the annual event last friday at your hotel. the event was attended by approx 80 people and the main purpose of event was to gave awards to the best employee. Further more, several presenations and team-building activites were conducted during the event.

Moreover, i was impressed by your staff professionalism. this is ainly because there were extremly helpful and responded quickly to our request. Secondly, the food was to amzing and the conference hall is too much specious and well-organised.

However, i would like to suggest few imporvemnts. Firstly , the wi-fi connection should be improve becuase several employess facing the problems during the preseantion. In additon, if possible please provide the more parking space for the guests conveint.

i hope you will consider my suggestion. \

Your Faithfully,

Shyam Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: it identifies the company’s annual event, gives details such as the attendance and award presentation, praises the staff, food and conference hall, and suggests improvements to Wi-Fi and parking. The purpose is clear and the suggestions are relevant. Details such as “approx 80 people” and the presentation difficulties make the account specific, while the positive comments explain what you valued. To strengthen the response further, develop the improvement requests with a little more explanation—for example, clarify how unreliable Wi-Fi affected the presentations or what parking arrangement would help guests. The closing is present, though a more consistently formal salutation and sign-off would better suit a letter to a hotel manager.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear, sensible progression: the opening explains why you are writing, the next paragraph describes the event, and later paragraphs cover positive features and suggested improvements. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these purposes, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “In addition” signal the relationships between ideas. This organisation makes the letter easy to follow. Some transitions feel formulaic, however, and the repeated use of sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” could be made more natural. Improve cohesion by linking details more directly—for instance, connect the Wi-Fi problem to the presentations in the same sentence—and use consistent capitalisation at the start of sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to a formal event letter, including “annual event,” “team-building activities,” “staff professionalism,” and “conference hall.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the range is sufficient to discuss the event, praise the hotel and request changes. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are noticeable, including “appericiation,” “oragnised,” “presenations,” and “imporvemnts.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “the food was to amzing” and “provide the more parking space.” These errors reduce the accuracy and polish of the vocabulary, even though the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for praise and polite requests.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at longer structures, such as “This is mainly because…” and the conditional request beginning “if possible.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but control is inconsistent: several sentences contain errors in verb form, agreement, articles or sentence construction. For example, “the main purpose … was to gave awards” should use an infinitive after “to,” and “the Wi-Fi connection should be improve” needs a past participle. In “there were extremely helpful,” the staff are missing as the subject, while “several employees facing the problems” lacks a finite verb. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention. Practise accurate sentence patterns and proofread each sentence for a subject and correctly formed verb.

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