Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about some feedback by the last event which our company has done on your hotel.

The eventy was on the last saturday of july and it was booked by the name of Amazon company and it was booked by the group leader, in that event there was a confrence meeting held on the top floor of your hotel with dinner. Further more, everything was good from food to decoration and the meeting area, the sound system of your hall is appretiated because of this we are abel to do our meeting without any problem and everyone were happy. Apart from this the thing which we like most is the manager and staff behaviour which was very good and they make things easy for us.

However, there are some areas which need some room for improvement are the order taking and washrooms, they were eyesoothing as every thing is clean but they are not and need some deep cleaning as their flooring in old.

your sincerly,

Patel Maharshi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three required points: it identifies the event as a company conference with dinner, praises the sound system and staff, and raises concerns about order-taking and the washrooms. These details make the response relevant and give the hotel manager useful feedback. However, some points are not fully clear or developed. For example, the event date and booking details are awkwardly presented, and the improvement request does not explain what specifically went wrong with order-taking. The description of the washrooms is also confusing because it first says they are clean, then says they need deep cleaning. Clarifying these points and making each suggestion more specific would make the message more complete and effective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The information follows a broadly sensible order: the purpose and event details come first, followed by positive comments and then areas for improvement. Linking phrases such as “Further more,” “Apart from this,” and “However” help signal these shifts. However, most of the letter is placed in one long paragraph, so the different purposes are not visually separated. Some connections are also unclear: “the thing which we like most” follows several positive details without a clear distinction, while the contrast between the washrooms being clean and needing deep cleaning is difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the event, praise, and suggestions, and make references and transitions more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including “conference meeting,” “sound system,” “decoration,” and “deep cleaning.” It also attempts more specific expressions such as “meeting area” and “order taking.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable, including “eventy,” “confrence,” “appretiated,” and “eyes[o]othing.” Phrases such as “feedback by the last event” and “done on your hotel” are not natural in this context and may make the reader pause. Choose standard collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, say “feedback on our recent event” and “held at your hotel.” This would make the message clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to combine ideas using longer sentences and clauses, and the main message is generally understandable. However, some sentence structures are difficult to control, particularly the long sentence beginning “The eventy was on the last saturday,” which joins several details without clear grammatical boundaries. There are also errors in verb forms and agreement, such as “our company has done” and “everyone were happy,” as well as article and sentence-pattern problems in “on your hotel.” The closing, “your sincerly,” also needs a correctly formed expression. Use shorter, complete sentences and check subject–verb agreement and tense consistency; for example, “Our company held a conference at your hotel” is clearer and more accurate.

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