Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing this letter in regards to provide feedback about our recent event held on previous monday on occassion of anaverssary of our tech company called 'IT WORMS'.It was a small gathering event for our team and their family members.

It was really a nice setup towards our seating arrangements and food quality was also great.There was diffrent type of cusines served during our lunch but the desserts was most loved by everyone.Even though there was some indoor gaming equipments provided by the staff for childrens.Everybody enjoyed for being there.

Although,everything was perfect and organised but there was no parking lot available on that which created traffic congestion for others and also got us fined to park on street.Other than this,there was shortage of staff for serving due to which food served to us was cold.I would like you to suggest improvement in these areas which will eventually help to boost earning and foot fall of consumers.We are thankful to you and your team for services provided.

Yours Faithfully

Tushar Kharb

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three required points: it identifies the company anniversary gathering and its attendees, praises the seating, food and desserts, and raises parking and staffing concerns. The purpose is clear and the tone is generally appropriate for a hotel manager. The positive details are more specific than the suggestions, however: the parking problem is explained through congestion and a fine, while the staffing issue is only briefly linked to cold food. To strengthen the response, explain more directly what practical changes you would like the hotel to make, such as providing guest parking or ensuring enough servers during meals. The closing thanks the team, but a more explicit request for the manager to consider the feedback would make the letter feel more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible overall order: the opening explains why you are writing, the next section describes what went well, and the final section presents problems and closes politely. This makes the letter easy to follow. Some connections between ideas are less smooth, though. For example, “Even though there was some indoor gaming equipments” does not form a complete contrast with the preceding praise, and “Although, everything was perfect and organised but” combines two contrasting linkers unnecessarily. Separate the positive and negative points into clearly focused paragraphs, and use simpler transitions such as “However” to introduce the concerns. Clearer sentence boundaries and references would also help the reader follow each point without having to interpret the links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “seating arrangements,” “food quality,” “traffic congestion,” and “shortage of staff.” These choices communicate the main points, and “desserts was most loved” conveys a clear positive impression. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “occassion,” “anaverssary,” “cusines,” and “foot fall.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “in regards to provide feedback” and “nice setup towards our seating arrangements.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. For instance, “to provide feedback on” and “the seating arrangements were excellent” would express your meaning more idiomatically. This would make the vocabulary more reliable and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “an event held on previous monday” and a contrast introduced by “Although.” The main message remains understandable, but errors in sentence construction and agreement sometimes make the reader pause. For example, “the desserts was” should use a plural verb, while “Although, everything was perfect and organised but” has an incomplete or incorrectly joined contrast. “There was some indoor gaming equipments provided” also has problems with the sentence structure and countability. Review subject–verb agreement, articles, and how to join clauses; use a full stop rather than linking several ideas with “and.” More consistently accurate sentences would demonstrate stronger control while retaining some structural variety.

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