Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I was delighted to organise an event at your hotel. Well! I am extremely happy that everything went well according to the plan.

Firstly, I would like to inform you that we had arranged a reunion celebration of our organisation's ex employees. Where, we had invited famous DJ band group for dance, also had some fun adult activities and at last there were few performance on reunion special speech.

Secondly, I was very impressed by the sitting arrangement that was provided by the hotel's staff. I found it very fascinating that chairs were arranged in such a way that nobody would block anyone's view. Moreover, when the staff greeted with a welcome juice, I was looking around and admiring the moment. However, I was quite dissatisfied with the temperature control.

To begin with, at first when I entered the hotel room, the room temperature was warm. So, I requested to on of the employees to check and adjust the cooling. Later I was guaranteed to fix it soon. Unfortunately, it was not yet fixed. I kindly request you to train your colleagues on giving first priority to their customers. At last, I hope the temperature control will be changed soon.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours sincerely,

Yesha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points: you explain that the event was a reunion for former employees, describe the seating and welcome drink positively, and raise the room-temperature problem with a request for improvement. The purpose and generally appreciative tone are clear. The event details are relevant, but the activities and performances are compressed into an unclear sentence, and the improvement request focuses mainly on staff training and fixing the temperature rather than explaining what change you expect the hotel to make. To strengthen the response further, develop the event description more clearly and make the requested action specific, while keeping the courteous tone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, moving from the event details to what you liked and then to the problem, with separate paragraphs that help the reader follow the main points. However, some linking is mechanical: “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “To begin with” announce stages without always showing the relationship between ideas. The sentence beginning “Where, we had invited…” is also detached from the previous sentence, interrupting the flow, and “At last” is an awkward transition to your final request. Connect related details within complete sentences and use transitions that express contrast or consequence more precisely. This would make the progression smoother and references clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a formal complaint-and-feedback letter, including relevant expressions such as “sitting arrangement,” “temperature control,” and “first priority.” Some attempts at more descriptive language, such as “fascinating” and “admiring the moment,” show a willingness to vary vocabulary, but they are not always natural in context. Several collocations and word choices are unclear, including “DJ band group,” “welcome juice,” and “reunion special speech,” which make parts of the event description harder to picture. Choose more conventional, precise phrases and avoid adding descriptive wording when a simpler expression is clearer. Your meaning remains generally understandable despite these inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall message is understandable. However, some errors in sentence construction, verb forms, agreement, and punctuation remain. For example, “Where, we had invited…” is a fragment, “there were few performance” has an agreement and plural-form problem, and “I requested to on of the employees” contains an incorrect grammatical pattern. The sentence “Later I was guaranteed to fix it soon” also does not clearly express who made the promise. Review complete sentence structure, articles and plurals, and verb patterns after verbs such as “request.” More accurate control of these forms would make the letter easier to read.

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