Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

i am writing a letter as last week my company hold the event at your hotel. The event was about how to grow the organisation more so we invited a lot of individuals from different cities so they can come up with new ideas. overall, most of the facilities were very good as staff was treated everone very well and food was also good. folks like the way you setup the stage for the chief guests and the also arrangements made for other people which were taking part in this event for their seting. But there are some few things on which you can improve the first is sound system. we faced numerous problems with sound system as one of our chief guest was giving speech and suddenly mic stooped working and after few minutes the speakers was making weird noises. so the folks were unable to hear the speech properly. so please work on that other than we enjoyed doing the evnet there.

Yours Faithfully,

mandeep Ram

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three required points: it explains that the company held an event about growing the organisation, praises the staff, food and stage arrangements, and identifies the sound system as an area to improve. The specific example of the microphone failing during a guest’s speech makes the complaint relevant and clear. This meets the task well, with some parts more fully covered than others: the event and the sound problem are explained, while the positive comments are mostly listed rather than developed. To strengthen the response further, clarify the event’s scale or purpose and explain more precisely what improvement you expect, such as equipment checks before speeches. A more consistently formal tone would also suit a letter to a hotel manager.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: event details, positive features, then a complaint and closing. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the shifts between these points are not clearly signposted. Linking words such as “overall,” “but,” and repeated “so” help connect ideas, but “so” is overused and some connections are awkward, particularly “so please work on that other than we enjoyed.” References such as “the also arrangements” and “other people” are not always easy to follow. Use separate paragraphs for the event and praise, the suggested improvement, and the closing; then choose more precise transitions such as “However” and “In addition.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main points, and some task-relevant expressions—“chief guest,” “sound system,” and “giving speech”—help convey the event and complaint. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings reduce precision and formality. “Folks” is too informal for this business letter, “seting” is unclear, and “weird noises” is vague where a more exact description would be useful. There are also spelling errors such as “stooped” and “evnet.” Aim for more precise, appropriately formal wording and check spelling carefully. For example, describe the equipment as producing “interference” or “distorted sound,” and refer to attendees as “participants” or “guests.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter attempts to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining the event’s purpose and describing the microphone failure. However, control is uneven: “last week my company hold the event” has an incorrect tense, and “staff was treated everone very well” has problems with sentence structure and agreement. Other examples include “one of our chief guest was giving speech” and “the speakers was making,” where articles, plurals and subject–verb agreement need attention. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially the lowercase “i” and the long run-on sentences. Practise accurate past-tense forms and agreement, and divide complex ideas into shorter sentences. This will make the message easier to read while preserving the range you are attempting.

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