Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I hope you're doing well. I am writing this letter in regard wtih expressing my feedback on a recent event that was organised in this hotel by my company on 10th November, 2026 at 11:00am on third floor as the event was a conference meeting.

Ostensibly, overall arragement of food, hospitality and ambience was marvellous as every staff member was quick, active and very helpful. Moreover, the decoration according to the theme was exquisite, and it was very detail oriented. Overall, the experience was great and everyone enjoyed this event.

Furthermore, the only issue that we faced was parking because many members of our company was not able to find a parking spot and the guard was not helping us either. So, in that case I would sugguest if a person is getting charged for valet parking then I believe proper service should be provided. Other than that, everything was great.

I will look forward for your response and hosting more events at your hotel.

Yours faithfully,

Gursis

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three requirements: it identifies the event as a company conference, gives its date, time and location, praises the hotel’s food, hospitality and themed decoration, and explains the parking problem with a suggestion about valet service. The purpose and overall positive stance are clear throughout, and the complaint is relevant and specific. Some details are less fully developed than others: for example, the event is described as a “conference meeting,” but the letter does not say what the conference involved or how the hotel’s facilities supported it. The improvement request could also be more explicit about what action the manager should take, such as ensuring attendants assist guests or clarifying valet arrangements. These additions would make the feedback more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information is organised in a clear sequence: the opening explains why you are writing, the next paragraph gives positive feedback, and the following paragraph introduces the problem and a suggestion. The closing also fits the purpose of a formal letter. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “Other than that” help show how the points relate, and the reader can follow the overall progression easily. At times, however, the transitions feel somewhat formulaic, and “Ostensibly” does not clearly signal the praise that follows. The parking paragraph also combines the problem, the guard’s response and the valet suggestion in one long sequence. Using a more direct transition and separating the requested improvement from the description of the problem would make cohesion more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a reasonably varied range for a hotel feedback letter, including “hospitality,” “ambience,” “exquisite,” and “valet parking.” These choices help convey both appreciation and a specific concern, and the message remains clear. There are also some inaccurate or unnatural choices that keep the vocabulary from being consistently precise: “Ostensibly” is not suitable for introducing genuine praise, “arrangement” is misspelled, and “detail oriented” is an awkward description of decoration. “Active” is also less natural than a word such as “attentive” for staff. Greater control of collocation and spelling, especially in less common vocabulary, would strengthen the letter while preserving its positive, professional tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The letter includes both simple statements and more complex forms, such as the sentence beginning “Moreover, the decoration according to the theme…” and the conditional suggestion about valet parking. Meaning is generally clear, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “many members of our company was” has a subject–verb agreement error; “I will look forward for your response” uses an incorrect preposition and verb pattern; and “on third floor” needs an article. The opening sentence is also overloaded, with several details joined together in a way that makes the structure difficult to manage. Aim for more consistently accurate agreement and article use, and divide long sentences so that each one expresses a clear main idea.

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