Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to give you some feedback about the event which I attended on 20 July 2026, at Garden Hall.

The event had been organized by Nike company where i worked since 2025. This was a annual prize distribution function. In this event Nike appreciate each employee for being a part of their company. They gave prizes for employee who made the highest sale in their organization.

During the celebration, I really liked the interior of the hall and also impressed by the music system. In addition, waiters also took care of their visitors by serving the food.

However, I really want if you can improve the food quality. This is because, majority of my coworkers told me the dinner was not too warm and also a lot of spice in it. If you make an improvements on it, will definitely give you more visitors.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Your Sincerely,

Harpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: providing event details, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting improvements. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the event details, the description of the 'prize distribution' could be more specific to better engage the reader. Similarly, the suggestions for improvement are clear but could be expanded with more concrete examples of how the service or food quality could be enhanced. Overall, the response covers the requirements well, but further elaboration would elevate the quality of the content.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'In addition' and 'However' to transition between ideas. While the flow is generally smooth, some of the linking is a bit mechanical. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different points requested in the prompt. To reach a higher band, try to vary your cohesive devices and ensure that the relationship between sentences is more fluid, particularly when moving from the positive feedback to the areas for improvement.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'organized', 'celebration', and 'consideration'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Nike appreciate each employee' (should be 'appreciated') and 'make an improvements' (should be 'make improvements'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your message clearly, it lacks the precision and variety of less common lexical items that would be expected at a higher band level. Focusing on more sophisticated collocations and ensuring grammatical agreement with your nouns will help improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'where i worked' (capitalization and tense), 'This was a annual' (article usage), and 'also a lot of spice in it' (missing verb). While these errors are noticeable, they do not significantly impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, article usage, and consistent verb tenses. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher band score in this criterion.

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