Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-07-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to share my experience regarding your service which you provide on last weekend, when our company organized event at your hotel. So, it was a celebration of achieving firms target which we made last year. We booked a party hall with all facilitates and this event held on 22nd July at your new hotel which opened in southwest area.

Firstly, i want to say that your staff was very kind-hearted as well as very sweet. Apart from this, the service is very impressive and too fast. Last but not the least, the view of the hotel is stunning. Moreover, as you new opened here we got 20% discount on every item. So, that's why i liked it so much.

Despite the fascinating service, i really think you should need to more focus on cleaning. One of our companies employee want to used a restroom, unfortunately, it is not clean properly and the unpleasant small ruined our mood. Therefore, I felt very awkward because all arrangement done by me.

Thank you and I hope that you give a prompt attention toward this issue.

Your faithfully,

Dharam Brar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: providing details about the event, mentioning positive aspects of the hotel, and suggesting areas for improvement. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention the staff were 'kind-hearted', providing a specific instance of their helpfulness would have strengthened the response. Similarly, the suggestion for improvement is clear, but could be expanded by suggesting how the hotel might prevent such issues in the future. Overall, the task is fully addressed, but the depth of detail could be improved to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific part of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Apart from this', 'Moreover', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or slightly misused, such as 'Last but not the least' (which should be 'Last but not least'). The referencing is generally clear, though the flow between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate, which helps the reader follow your argument easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'fascinating', 'stunning', and 'prompt'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'firms target' (should be 'firm's target'), 'new opened' (should be 'newly opened'), and 'unpleasant small' (should be 'unpleasant smell'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring the correct form of words is used in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies ('which you provide on last weekend' instead of 'which you provided last weekend'), article usage ('at your hotel' vs 'at the hotel'), and verb forms ('want to used' instead of 'wanted to use'). While these errors are noticeable and occur frequently, they rarely prevent the reader from understanding your message. To reach a higher band, you should focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage.

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