Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently helped your company organise an event at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter:

– Provide details about the event
– Mention what you particularly liked about the hotel
– Suggest areas for improvement.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir / Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

i hope this email finds you well

i am writing this letter to inform you about the event which we held at parkson hotel at 25 august at 1300. i have arranged every thing including decoration,cooking ,sitting arrangement as well as dj system .

Apart from this i also maintain a guest list and send the invititation to everyone so they can maintain their schdule accordingly.

I like the staff of this hotel because everyone is very helpful and cooperative .but there are some areas where need to improvement .please remove the flower pot from the entrance and fix it in the corner near the dinnig and please arrange a singer so all the guests will enjoyed and make sure food is good .

i hope you will pay attention on this event and fix all areas

your sincerly ,

Harjit Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: event details, positive feedback, and suggestions for improvement. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the development of ideas. The details regarding the event are somewhat generic, and the suggestions for improvement, such as moving a flower pot, lack a professional tone suitable for a formal letter to a hotel manager. To improve, you should expand on the event's purpose and provide more sophisticated, constructive feedback regarding the hotel's services to ensure the response is fully developed and meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a basic logical structure, starting with an introduction, moving to the event details, and concluding with suggestions. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited. There is a lack of linking words or transition phrases to connect sentences smoothly. For example, the transition between the event details and the positive feedback is abrupt. Paragraphing is also insufficient, as the entire body of the letter is essentially one block of text. Improving the use of cohesive devices like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would significantly enhance the flow and readability of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'I like the staff' and 'make sure food is good' are simplistic. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'maintain a guest list' (where 'manage' or 'compile' would be more appropriate) and 'maintain their schedule' (where 'adjust' or 'plan' would be better). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise, formal vocabulary related to event management and professional correspondence, avoiding informal phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding punctuation, capitalization, and verb tense consistency. For instance, 'i' is consistently written in lowercase, and there are missing articles (e.g., 'at 25 august' should be 'on the 25th of August'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. There are also errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'all the guests will enjoyed'. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, consistent capitalization, and ensuring that your verb tenses align with the timeline of the event.

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